Wednesday, September 23, 2009

let my poemlette take you on

let that eclipse languish
in its own place of choosing
I will take a detour
increasing my velocity
I was never asked
why should I be a part of it
mere objects those,
I am alive & I thrive
this rambling will go one
if I don't stop it

here I leave loose ends for you
to decide what path to take
isn't it true, we like to choose
let my poemlette take you on
while I do take a detour

15 comments:

ThomG said...

simply beautiful. And inspiring. Thanks.

Rajlakshmi said...

Very deep write.. Beautifuly penned.

anthonynorth said...

There are many layers to that one.

Tumblewords: said...

A fine trek. Detour or not.

wordvamp said...

Your pieces continue to inspire me thank you.

http://wordvamp.wordpress.com/2009/09/23/an-offering-for-death/

maglomaniac said...

The second part was equally powerful as the first.
"here I leave loose ends for you
to decide what path to take
isn't it true, we like to choose".
I liked these the most.

an eye for an eye makes the whole world blind

~Harsha

Just someone said...

That was just awesome! the best ever... :)

Mark said...

I look forward to your writings every week!

This was no exception.

Bernard S. Jansen said...

My favorite part:

"I was never asked
why should I be a part of it"

This is a common theme of modern life.

Jeeves said...

Poemlette. Interesting

Purple Houses said...

Very powerful. I like the "loose ends" line.

swapnap said...

"leave loose ends for you..." was such a nice usage.Enjoyed reading this one.

Jane Doe said...

Another breathtaking piece gautami, very powerful and thought provoking. Why is it that we are not asked more often whether or not we want to be a part of something?

Ann (bunnygirl) said...

Nicely done. I like the last line, hinting that we don't all have to be inspired down the same path.

asleeponmyfeet said...

I'm struck by the way this seems to be a rambling stream of consciousness. At the same time, it could be a very cleverly constructed piece...
The message is great.
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