Thursday, September 24, 2009

tale of two toes


scissor fell on my toe
cutting it into two
I watched part of it walk away
and what remained with me
jigged in glee-.
it had hated that toe.

being toeless was one great state
I saved on the nail polish
although my right foot looked ghoulish
with a hammer and chisel
I matched the left to its pair
it was fate that the two toes got on a date

I am left with best feet in town
no, no, please don't look down!

30 comments:

Irene said...

Hilarious and quirky.

anthonynorth said...

Loved the humour here - almost Kingesque.

rallentanda said...

I don't know what stimulant you are taking at the moment but it's working well and I'd like some too!

Jeeves said...

Love this piece. Iam looking at my toes now

Tamra said...

A funny piece of toe humor here! Thanks.

Derrick said...

Hi Gautami,

I'm glad this finished on a fun note; I was squirming from the hammer and chisel!

Anonymous said...

from Therese B. at RWP -- This poem adds another dimension to the sidebar statement on your blog: "While you are here, don't forget to leave your footprints." Feet as a powerful metaphor for who we are, how we stand and tread, upright as human beings, on the earth.

Cynthia Short said...

Very darkly humorous, and a bit icky, but a fun read! Thinking of the amputated toes "hooking up". HA
Great!

Janice Thomson said...

Love it! Another side of the wonderful poetess Guatami...

Paul Oakley said...

Clever! A bit ghoulish, in a cute way. This was fun.

Lorraine said...

mmm Moses knowes that his toeses aren't roses but moses supposes amiss...

Rajlakshmi said...

Ouch that was kind of dark humour.. Very abstract though could be interpreted in many ways.. Beautifuly penned..

briarcat said...

You got to wonder what they talked about on the date

davidmoolten said...

I like the humor and the playful approach you take to this. I could visualize the cartoon like effects quite vividly.

Nathan said...

Gruesome and funny -- a great combination!

Susan Helene Gottfried said...

Worthy of the Brothers Grimm themselves!

Linda said...

I am thinking about the women in China with their bound and mutilated feet, to create daintiness. So, while your poem is funny, it has this sad connection.
I liked the rather glib attitude you managed to create.
Thank you for sculpting this tale, Gautami.

sage said...

this brought a smile to my face...

Francis Scudellari said...

I smiled through the pain of reading about severed toes... very nicely done. I loved the tone of this.

Tumblewords: said...

saving on nail polish probably overshadows the pain required to reach that point. Good toe tale.

Deb said...

Incredibly inventive, and a surprising pleasure to read (I giggled, too). Thank you!

EKSwitaj said...

I agree that this is remarkably inventive. There's a lot of humor but as others have pointed out, there's something sad lurking around the edges.

Raven's Wing Poetry said...

A bit of dark and twisted humor that I enjoyed reading (although I think I'll be keeping an eye on my toes tonight).

-Nicole

Leigh Anne said...

Thanks so much for leaving the link! This was wickedly fun - I could see Tim Burton making a short film of this - v. vivid!

Lawrence Gladeview said...

gautami thanks for the chuckle this afternoon! the voice in this poem is fun and witty. that lat couplet a surprise, i was thinking this might travel in the direction of jealousy and possibly rage. enjoyed!
-lawrence

Bone said...

Wow, that was an unexpected surprise. Made me smile and chuckle :)

RBroeker said...

It sounds a bit psychedelic, but with a smiling eye.

Best wishes
Ralf

Wayne Pitchko said...

quirky toes are sweeet....thanks for sharing

bearlyaudible said...

Ouch, but bemusing too! You just can't turn away! It's all been well said, but I'll add my name, my appreciation here. Maybe you can give us another ghoulish treat when our October Halloween arrives!

Julie Jordan Scott said...

wow. the close of the first stanza is impeccably truthful! Wow, truth being collaged into a poetry about whopper lies. Gotta love it! :-)