Friday, October 09, 2009

solidified

I hold that talisman of silence
my heart flames over it
in all that light
the darkness oozes into me

the woman within
splits into numerous splinters
clawed nails scratch
the invisible walls

that tight squeeze
solidifies oxygenated blood
pieces of which fall
on the concrete floor

I get on my knees
sort through the tiny pieces
pick a few of those
and put into my mouth

eating my own blood
solid though it is now
isn't as difficult
as I had initially thought

"you sit there writing poetry over my dead soul"

32 comments:

anthonynorth said...

Wow! This is very powerful.

RBroeker said...

To eat the own blood and not to drink it - a hard scene, submitting an untold drama.

Best wishes
Ralf

Yellow Tulip said...

wow...intense

Belle said...

I loved the intensity... right about now, especially, this was just the perfect thing for me to read. Brilliant job.

Cynthia Short said...

This was dark and powerful. I like the feeling you conveyed of being trapped within yourself...I write a lot of that type - working through things...

Sophie said...

This took my breath away!

swapnap said...

The portrayal in the second stanza was too good and intense. Good write.

Beth said...

The whole poem builds beautifully and darkly to that last line, reconnectd to the poet in the reader. Yes, intense and somehow beautiful.

Jim said...

Yours is a true keeper for the Halloween holiday season. You envisioned and then described this object, I will call a critter, so well. Spooky and scary it is!
..
BTW, eating my own blood sometimes is my first aid technique. It helps stop bleeding when nothing else is handy. I really wouldn't want to eat many scabs.
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SandyCarlson said...

Splintered life, splintered self....The power, the magic. This is a wonderful poem, friend.

Ofira Sephiroth said...

Very powerful poem. You never cease to amaze me.

Heliotropism said...

WOW, I felt like I was there, watching this all take place. Your words are vivid and full of emotion! Very nice.

Anonymous said...

Whitesnake is not trying to find himself. He left his wife for KB have they have moved in together

Geraldine said...

I agree, very powerful words. I especially enjoyed the second stanza. Good interpretation of the prompt, unique.

Maggie said...

This is a very thought provoking poem.

The Dark Lord said...

WOW, this is really powerful poetry.. intense, strong, dark.. An exquisite read..

LadyGarfield said...

gosh! that was brilliant... intense. thanks for sharing.

murat11 said...

I love the radiance of this darkness:

So many wonderful pieces here: "my heart flames over it," "the darkness oozes," the entire fourth stanza, and the stunning loveliness of "eating my own blood..."

Patois said...

Fabulously powerful. Truly.

spacedlaw said...

A little gruesome perfection.
I like the intensity of the poem.

Sue said...

we do indeed sometimes have to swallow/eat the splintered remains of our lives. Very powerful images. Potent!

Sweetest in the Gale said...

Dark and intense...I could feel the passionate emotion in your words!

keiths ramblings said...

What a deep and powerful piece. I'm running out of adjectives to use when commenting upon your work!

Tammie Lee said...

you had me with the first few lines. Awesome to be so in touch with deep feelings that words like this can rise to the surface.

Vita Stunder said...

Wow!

Impressive and powerful!
I love this poem.

Loch Rob said...

Dark, intense, visual in its imagery. Writing is a great way to cast an image upon the mind. Nice.

Tumblewords: said...

Intense. Awesome processing!

Felicity said...

Wow! Very vivid images. And the intensity of your words is quite awe-inspiring.

Dee Martin said...

"sorting through the tiny pieces", visceral.

Kathies Poet Tree said...

Very interesting poem. I don't quite know what to think of it but I like it. I need to mull it over a bit.

Linda Jacobs said...

the woman within
splits into numerous splinters

The above lines really spoke to me. How many splinters can we split into as women?

You amaze me with your insights!

Leo said...

talisman of silence... WOW.. powerful..