Wednesday, December 15, 2010

a picture


a picture
nothing more
blue lifts my mood
I wish to hug that child
his father is lost to him
crown is a burden for the baby too
he is unaware of it as yet
he wants his father to love him, 

"king holds his child, 
but his heart is as dead as his queen"

40 comments:

kathew said...

very thoughtful

Daigu said...

"his father is lost to him", in more ways than one. Nice work.

Sioux said...

And His Father loved His beloved Son! But the crown was very heavy, indeed.

Helen said...

This is a lovely Magpie ....

budh.aaah said...

Nice magpie

Rajlakshmi said...

thats very deep... beautiful write

Kristen Haskell said...

Merry Christmas

Glenn Buttkus said...

Lovely, thoughtful, and rife
with emotion, affection,
and compassion; good poem.

There are those lovely lines in
the film BEN HUR; one of Joseph's
customers, angry that a table has
not been repaired yet, said,
"Where is that son of yours, and
why does he not take care of
his father's business?"
Joseph said, smiling,
"Oh he cares very much, and
he is off as we speak taking
care of his father's business."
There was no veil of forgetfulness
for the infant Jesus, so possibly
he already felt the weight of
his sacrifices to come.

Reflections said...

Powerful piece, so heartfelt.

Gemma @ Greyscale said...

A refreshing perspective! Indeed, the mother image dominates in these scenes of a child. Somehow the father image is elusive!

Judy Roney said...

What an interesting take on this photo. "crown is a burden for the baby" really got my attention.

Jingle said...

neat.

Tess Kincaid said...

Yes, still so blissfully unaware. Blue always lifts my mood, as well. Beautiful piece.

Mama Zen said...

This is lovely!

Mary said...

Oh, that's wonderful. Yes, the father/son relationship makes it so fresh. Thanks for commenting on mine as well.

Sue J said...

This one is very interesting. Nice Magpie.

R. Burnett Baker said...

Oh, I like this very much! "crown is a burden for the baby too." How very true...

Rick

KB said...

Poor child unaware of his great loss. Have a great weekend.

One Stop - The Place For Poets, Writers and Artists said...

It is a lovely Magpie and 55
I tried to fit them into the same I have a hard time writing so few words
you are marvelous at it

moonie smiles

Teresa said...

A beautiful poem for the prompt.

G-Man said...

Gautami...
You are such a fantastic writer!
I Loved your 55!
Thank You so much for playing, and please have a Kick Ass Week-End...G

Brian Miller said...

the burden of the crown passed so one day too he may hold a baby and feel the same...

Tumblewords: said...

Love the perspective of this - finely tuned!

Alice Audrey said...

So sad for the baby, and the king as well.

Belinda said...

That crown is a burden. Then later the cross comes. Great 55.

sheila said...

Oooooo nice 55! Very powerful!

HOOTIN' ANNI said...

Oh my goodness...such poignancy!! Powerful words in such a short 55. Great.

My Flash 55 is posted Scroll down below my show n tell for Friday to find it.

Have a great weekend.

Tina said...

thats a lovely way of putting it and the picture you chose was a perfect choice.

Tina

nimaruichi said...

Disturbing; unfortunatley true all too often.
:)

izzy said...

Interesting- yet he will come to know his father...thanks.

hedgewitch said...

Yes, he has his mother, but his Father has put him up for adoption by the faceless crowd. Nice mag, and excellent 55.

Monkey Man said...

Intense.

Thom said...

This was wonderful my friend. What a gifted writer you are. Have a great Friday :)

Kavita said...

Succinct but very powerful! Nice...

Eric Alder said...

Quite a different take on that picture than the others I've read. Nice job, Gautami!

signed...bkm said...

nice write....the crown is indeed heavy...love your take on the prompt...bkm

Margaret Bednar said...

...I like so much of it. I just don't understand the part where you say "he wanted his father to love him". It has certainly made me think and think but I don't understand why you put that. But that is OK - poetry is like that. ;)

ds said...

"crown is a burden for the baby too" Yes. So much going on here--as kathew wrote, it is very thoughtful indeed. Thank you.

Carrie Burtt said...

There is a beautiful compassion and love in your thougts here....a lovely Magpie! :-)

ninotaziz said...

Lovely and deep, Gautami