Poetry for me is a way of living, it comes out of nowhere and I have to write it down. How I write, what I write, I decide. I am not asking you to be judgemental. I am gifted with the ability to see beyond the obvious.
Wednesday, December 15, 2010
a picture
a picture nothing more blue lifts my mood I wish to hug that child his father is lost to him crown is a burden for the baby too he is unaware of it as yet he wants his father to love him,
"king holds his child, but his heart is as dead as his queen"
Lovely, thoughtful, and rife with emotion, affection, and compassion; good poem.
There are those lovely lines in the film BEN HUR; one of Joseph's customers, angry that a table has not been repaired yet, said, "Where is that son of yours, and why does he not take care of his father's business?" Joseph said, smiling, "Oh he cares very much, and he is off as we speak taking care of his father's business." There was no veil of forgetfulness for the infant Jesus, so possibly he already felt the weight of his sacrifices to come.
...I like so much of it. I just don't understand the part where you say "he wanted his father to love him". It has certainly made me think and think but I don't understand why you put that. But that is OK - poetry is like that. ;)
40 comments:
very thoughtful
"his father is lost to him", in more ways than one. Nice work.
And His Father loved His beloved Son! But the crown was very heavy, indeed.
This is a lovely Magpie ....
Nice magpie
thats very deep... beautiful write
Merry Christmas
Lovely, thoughtful, and rife
with emotion, affection,
and compassion; good poem.
There are those lovely lines in
the film BEN HUR; one of Joseph's
customers, angry that a table has
not been repaired yet, said,
"Where is that son of yours, and
why does he not take care of
his father's business?"
Joseph said, smiling,
"Oh he cares very much, and
he is off as we speak taking
care of his father's business."
There was no veil of forgetfulness
for the infant Jesus, so possibly
he already felt the weight of
his sacrifices to come.
Powerful piece, so heartfelt.
A refreshing perspective! Indeed, the mother image dominates in these scenes of a child. Somehow the father image is elusive!
What an interesting take on this photo. "crown is a burden for the baby" really got my attention.
neat.
Yes, still so blissfully unaware. Blue always lifts my mood, as well. Beautiful piece.
This is lovely!
Oh, that's wonderful. Yes, the father/son relationship makes it so fresh. Thanks for commenting on mine as well.
This one is very interesting. Nice Magpie.
Oh, I like this very much! "crown is a burden for the baby too." How very true...
Rick
Poor child unaware of his great loss. Have a great weekend.
It is a lovely Magpie and 55
I tried to fit them into the same I have a hard time writing so few words
you are marvelous at it
moonie smiles
A beautiful poem for the prompt.
Gautami...
You are such a fantastic writer!
I Loved your 55!
Thank You so much for playing, and please have a Kick Ass Week-End...G
the burden of the crown passed so one day too he may hold a baby and feel the same...
Love the perspective of this - finely tuned!
So sad for the baby, and the king as well.
That crown is a burden. Then later the cross comes. Great 55.
Oooooo nice 55! Very powerful!
Oh my goodness...such poignancy!! Powerful words in such a short 55. Great.
My Flash 55 is posted Scroll down below my show n tell for Friday to find it.
Have a great weekend.
thats a lovely way of putting it and the picture you chose was a perfect choice.
Tina
Disturbing; unfortunatley true all too often.
:)
Interesting- yet he will come to know his father...thanks.
Yes, he has his mother, but his Father has put him up for adoption by the faceless crowd. Nice mag, and excellent 55.
Intense.
This was wonderful my friend. What a gifted writer you are. Have a great Friday :)
Succinct but very powerful! Nice...
Quite a different take on that picture than the others I've read. Nice job, Gautami!
nice write....the crown is indeed heavy...love your take on the prompt...bkm
...I like so much of it. I just don't understand the part where you say "he wanted his father to love him". It has certainly made me think and think but I don't understand why you put that. But that is OK - poetry is like that. ;)
"crown is a burden for the baby too" Yes. So much going on here--as kathew wrote, it is very thoughtful indeed. Thank you.
There is a beautiful compassion and love in your thougts here....a lovely Magpie! :-)
Lovely and deep, Gautami
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