Wednesday, January 05, 2011

curtain of pebbled path

in the shredded papers
plausible reason
churns willingly
silence shadows it

a curtain of pebbled path
leads me to the beach
seashells contain the ocean
in my palm I hold one

links of time taint it
shard of glass
tells me a story
a past, or a future

"matter mixes with surreal to make sense"
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36 comments:

jaerose said...

Yes, an 'ocean in your palm' - beautiful image..a wonderful ebb and flow of words..Jae

Friko said...

I came to look for your magpie and found three excellent poems.

uma.a said...

Love the second para...well done

Lilly's World!!! said...

Nicely Done!!

Those Random Tales said...

Loved and enjoyed reading it!! :)

Gemma @ Greyscale said...

"Shredded papers" lead to shredded images! Like multi-coloured confetti...a celebration and/or a sign of the throw away society!

sage said...

a nice job linking the parts together. I like the title!

Kim Nelson said...

"matter mixes with surreal to make sense"
Certainly does.
Exceptional imagery here.

ThomG said...

The images that this poem conjures up are just wonderful.

Sheilagh's Sweet Nothings said...

Very prettily said!

River said...

I love the title and the imagery is splendid. Nice write. :)

One Stop - The Place For Poets, Writers and Artists said...

reminds me of the beautifully polished bottle glass we find at the coast - each piece has a story to tell.

Nicely told 55

Monkey Man said...

Three word Wednesday entertwined with a 55...very well done.

My 55 is HERE .

g-man said...

Gautami...?
Was this your 55?
Weather it was or wasn't it was most excellent.
Thank you for visiting, and have a Kick Ass Week-End

marousia said...

Love this poem - the juxtaposing images are marvelous

Tarang Sinha said...

Yes, I liked the title and the last line(Matter mixes...). Nice piece of writing but honestly, struggled to understand the gist.

Strummed Words said...

The ocean has so many stories to tell and to remind us. Excellent Magpie.

PattiKen said...

Lovely, Gautami. There's something spare and kind of Japanese in your words, like one of those wonderful woodcuts.

TALON said...

I loved the last stanza - how a piece of glass is full of mystery and magic.

My 55: escapee

lime said...

you never know what stories the pebbles, shells, and shards have to tell

anthonynorth said...

Beautifully done - especially the last line.

5thsister said...

I love the lilting manner of your woven words...draws me in and never disappoints.

Yvonne Osborne said...

I love the voice here.
especiallly
"seashells contain the ocean
in my palm I hold one"

And thanks again for posting my link over at G-Man's.

Myrna R. said...

Lovely. I had to read it twice to reexerience its images and melody.

Alice Audrey said...

"matter mixes with surreal to make sense"

Great phrase.

ladynimue said...

Loved the last line ! totally !! As always all your posts have such a lovely aura about them ..

Akelamalu said...

Excellent 55!

Linda said...

The ocean is full of history...to hold that in one's hand. Powerful.

MorningAJ said...

Interesting approach to the two themes.

Claudia said...

a whole ocean in your palm..nice..

joanny said...

This is an absolutely stunning poem, the imagery that it evokes in the mind's eye and the way it titillates the senses. Beautiful.

joanny

Lulda Casadaga said...

we can never have too many shells...or colored glass! Lovely 55

hedgewitch said...

Interesting contrasts and images.Hard to believe it's only 55 words.

Nanka said...

Felt like a beach comber and the last two verses did it. Beautiful stories echo!!

Eaton Bennett said...

the end of something perhaps and pondering the future are where your words take me.
Thank you for visiting my 55 :))

Kavita said...

Oh.. nice!! Very nice!
Time tainted fragments sure make it tough to decipher certain codes of life... don't they? Thank God for surreality for making it easier!

A lovely piece, Gautami!