in the shredded papers
plausible reason
churns willingly
silence shadows it
a curtain of pebbled path
leads me to the beach
seashells contain the ocean
in my palm I hold one
links of time taint it
shard of glass
tells me a story
a past, or a future
"matter mixes with surreal to make sense"
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36 comments:
Yes, an 'ocean in your palm' - beautiful image..a wonderful ebb and flow of words..Jae
I came to look for your magpie and found three excellent poems.
Love the second para...well done
Nicely Done!!
Loved and enjoyed reading it!! :)
"Shredded papers" lead to shredded images! Like multi-coloured confetti...a celebration and/or a sign of the throw away society!
a nice job linking the parts together. I like the title!
"matter mixes with surreal to make sense"
Certainly does.
Exceptional imagery here.
The images that this poem conjures up are just wonderful.
Very prettily said!
I love the title and the imagery is splendid. Nice write. :)
reminds me of the beautifully polished bottle glass we find at the coast - each piece has a story to tell.
Nicely told 55
Three word Wednesday entertwined with a 55...very well done.
My 55 is HERE .
Gautami...?
Was this your 55?
Weather it was or wasn't it was most excellent.
Thank you for visiting, and have a Kick Ass Week-End
Love this poem - the juxtaposing images are marvelous
Yes, I liked the title and the last line(Matter mixes...). Nice piece of writing but honestly, struggled to understand the gist.
The ocean has so many stories to tell and to remind us. Excellent Magpie.
Lovely, Gautami. There's something spare and kind of Japanese in your words, like one of those wonderful woodcuts.
I loved the last stanza - how a piece of glass is full of mystery and magic.
My 55: escapee
you never know what stories the pebbles, shells, and shards have to tell
Beautifully done - especially the last line.
I love the lilting manner of your woven words...draws me in and never disappoints.
I love the voice here.
especiallly
"seashells contain the ocean
in my palm I hold one"
And thanks again for posting my link over at G-Man's.
Lovely. I had to read it twice to reexerience its images and melody.
"matter mixes with surreal to make sense"
Great phrase.
Loved the last line ! totally !! As always all your posts have such a lovely aura about them ..
Excellent 55!
The ocean is full of history...to hold that in one's hand. Powerful.
Interesting approach to the two themes.
a whole ocean in your palm..nice..
This is an absolutely stunning poem, the imagery that it evokes in the mind's eye and the way it titillates the senses. Beautiful.
joanny
we can never have too many shells...or colored glass! Lovely 55
Interesting contrasts and images.Hard to believe it's only 55 words.
Felt like a beach comber and the last two verses did it. Beautiful stories echo!!
the end of something perhaps and pondering the future are where your words take me.
Thank you for visiting my 55 :))
Oh.. nice!! Very nice!
Time tainted fragments sure make it tough to decipher certain codes of life... don't they? Thank God for surreality for making it easier!
A lovely piece, Gautami!
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