Friday, February 11, 2011

lined up...

that house,
with quaint windows beckons me
I peep inside.
wavering shadows hide something
outside sunshine enhances the depth of darkness inside
I rub the walls
the crumbled powder of blankness
engulfs me
I imagine a dog sitting at the door

"headhunters have placed the heads on the inners walls.
what ails them, I wonder?"

35 comments:

nan said...

I like the mystery and innocent curiosity of the narrator. Very interesting poem.

Brian Miller said...

i like the feeling of the walls, it is something i would do...not sure about that last line, if i get it.

Austin said...

Soft walk through thoughts there . . . I spent about 3 minutes pondering the last line though.

Without Words is my 55 this week.

Jingle said...

outside sunshine enhances the depth of darkness inside

love the line, beautiful magpie in 55.
Cheers.

Judy Roney said...

Mysterious and scary. I really like this and want to know more. :)

G-Man said...

Gautami...
You have turned an innocent looking house, into something enigmatic.
Wonderful Job My Friend.
Loved your 55!
Thanks for playing, and have a Kick Ass Week-End...G

flaubert said...

Gautami, you added quite the twist to this. It seemed very peaceful and then ...

Pamela

Marianv said...

Loved that last line. Things are not always what they seem.

LKHarris-Kolp said...

Very intriguing with a surprise ending... I enjoyed this on a lot!

~laurie

L.L. Barkat said...

"I rub the walls"

I liked that simple image.

Alice Audrey said...

I can't seem to shake the idea of the kind of headhunters that find you a new job. Twisted, I know.

Monkey Man said...

Quite the mystery.

Akelamalu said...

I love mysterious houses!

Nice 55. :)

hedgewitch said...

Liked the twist and the bizarre ending...I'm thinking portraits of ancestors dripping cobwebs...nice magpie/55 combination.

lime said...

goodness what must lurk inside...

twitches said...

Great ending!

RNSANE said...

It seemed like a nice little house in the winter snow - then, all of a sudden you took that mysterious turn!!

My 55 is at:

http://rnsane.blogspot.com/2011/02/friday-flash-55-happy-valentines-day.html

Stranger said...

I like the feel here -- but the last lines are in quotations, who is speaking these words?
What ails the headhunters or the heads?
"crumbled powder of blankness" is a neat description thought.

Madeleine Begun Kane said...

Very evocative and mysterious.

Gerry/Strummed words said...

A little spooky, all those secrets within!

Rethabile said...

Nicely done, Gautami. Happy you're still writing...

Philip Thrift said...

Loved the feeling of mystery left behind.

Everyday Goddess said...

you've made me wonder more about this mysterious house. nice magging!

barbara said...

Pretty certain it isn't what you intended, but I like the idea of the dog saying that last bit. "what ails them?", indeed.

lightverse said...

This was such a cool read. I did not expect the ending, but really enjoyed it!

Tumblewords: said...

Oh! I would never have guessed. Nice piece!

Short poems said...

Really interesting poem, mysterious and scary one. So nicely written!
All the best
Marinela x

Cathy said...

Those last lines, they could be read some many ways

Elizabeth said...

Isn't that what we do when we meet someone, mentally rub the walls, trying to get in, and then making our own pictures from spoken words? Love the feelings in this one,

Elizabeth

Jeanne Aguilar said...

This poem has a beautiful flow to it. I liked hearing the inner thoughts of the narrator, and at the end I wonder if the question is about the head hunters or the hunted?

irene said...

Enigmatic!

Kavita said...

quite a chilling 55, Gautami.. in all its innocence, it sure made me ponder deep!!
Sometimes, the most mundane of landscapes present the most creative of imaginations!

Tess Kincaid said...

This makes me feel very uneasy!

Erin Davis said...

I love the "crumbled powder of blankness" and the surprising twist at the end!

James said...

"sunshine enhances the depths of darkness"... very true and a great bit in this eerie piece.