Wednesday, March 16, 2011

an ordinary moment

that smile. 
it holds for a while.
I look at the fingers.
those toes neatly trimmed
I rub my fingertips 
like the feel of those.
when smile wavers to give way
to twinkling eyes-
I want to take a picture
as I wish to hold on to that moment
but I know I can't do justice to it

"the pictures come to life only when you take those-
an ordinary moment turns into an event"

30 comments:

Chris G. said...

Some moments are indescribable, even by a camera. They are beautiful and wonderful and the feeling stirred is simply beyond all replication; lovely sentiments shared with us today. Fine write!

Brian Miller said...

smiles. if only we could capture those moments...no we cant capture all the magic but i would settle for just a little...

LauraX said...

So many of those moments, yes? They are the string of perfect pearls that form our lives (with the somewhat less perfect knots tied between).

Tilly Bud said...

Those are the moments we hold on to.

Shashi said...

What a lovely moment.. and so vivid.. I enjoyed it throughly... Thanks for sharing..


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Asobime said...

A lovely poem. Enchanting.

Lady Nyo

Violet said...

"...but I know I can't do justice to it" - so true. But with poetry one tries and has something to show for the moment, even if not entire. Well said!

(Thanks, too, for reading and leaving a comment on One Shot Wednesday poem - much appreciated!)

flaubert said...

How beautifully said, Gautami.

Pamela

hedgewitch said...

True words, nicely framed, and presented. The ordinary moments make up our lives, and treasuring the good ones is important.

Glynn said...

You've captured the loveliness of an ordinary moment. Well done.

Helena said...

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signed...bkm said...

capturing loveliness is truly an art...bkm

Doe said...

Nice one! no we can't do justice to life's little moments, but we can always try and keep a mental note
Cherish the day :)

G-Man said...

Yeah?
And I'd like to see a pic of those neatly trimmed toes!
Loved your One Shot!

Jannie Funster said...

This reminds me that it's all made of ordinary moments, too many to ever photograph. So much great stuff to witness and be aware of!

xoxo

Kavita said...

i wish the camera could even capture the magic in those little moments.. well, technology says we need to make do with just the image for now.. the memory lies in our mind..
:)

Alegria Imperial said...

Such moments encrusted in the heart, engraved in memory that keep flowing in and out as words--I'm sure this is not the last poem out of it! Thank you!

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Steve Isaak said...

Solid lead-up, love the last three lines (I can relate strongly to them).

lori said...

Sweet word picture of trying to capture the beautiful moments we encounter day to day :)

versebender said...

as much as we want to capture these moment...we somehow can't. It is just outside our grasp. vb

PattiKen said...

Those moments are the photo albums of the mind. You words reminded me of many such moments when my kids were babies, and I was in awe of the miracle of it all. No camera could ever do that justice.

Reggie said...

Isn't it good that our minds can capture these moments also?....I like this

Madeleine Begun Kane said...

A lovely poem, indeed. :)

vivinfrance said...

You've said something profound with this poem. Thank you.

neil reid said...

This poem is so soft-spoken yet vivid, even sensual in how it can touch. But even saying that seems too "loud" for what this poem gives.

Just those first two lines, "that smile. it holds for a while." takes my breath away. Quiet does not mean meaning cannot be heard as so well demonstrated here. I am really impressed with this effort of yours. Thanks much! ~neil

sonny said...

the thing with me is ..i almost always feel i CAN capture that moment...lol..

this was a sweet write gautami...nice to meet you and fancy that...you live in delhi too !!!

kewlbeans...!

hi...am sonny...:)

irene said...

A poem which celebrates those ordinary moments we treasure.

ravenswingpoetry.com said...

You encapsulated what I try to do with words...capture the picture. And there are times I am not sure I do the picture justice either.

-Nicole

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