I could be a millionaire if I had the money
but I dabble in purple, maybe green too,
with yellow stars thrown in
I can't see the nest, not the wasp
but I know I painted it somewhere
in the whites that you see
I hold the moss reverently
rub it in the background
knowing he will gleefully like it
he had never been accused of being intelligent
but he had been accused of much worse
of painting the rusted hinge into flower bed
"but who are we decide the norms,
individuality will peep out of nothing,
I and you would be left lurching"
38 comments:
Yes... you could be anything, especially dressed in those royal colors.
lovely poem.
Indeed so very true..thanks..you always make me think and wonder..I find myself speechless.. but then somehow words flow to comment..well done..
Very nice...I am not good at poetry but your sure are.Our own perspective about ourselves can be indeed mysterious !
keep dreaming.
you rock.
A++
Just lovely. So vivid.
Love the ending!
Gautami,
As you might realize by now, I do like your approach to poetry.
There's a coyness to the humor -- or a tease to it.
Let me in on what I may be mistaking as one of your secrets. I think you've ended with quoted, italicized lines before.
Are you creating dialogue? Quoting 'a master'? Quoting yourself? Extending the playfulness by notably quoting yourself?
I like it!
Trulyfool
How lovely to write a poem for centus
Beautiful poem, Gautami.
This is so lovely Gautami. Perfect!
I just love the beginning ! & the wasp,
moss, -then I think I lose who you mean by " he"- the artist ? thanks !
The second stanza is wonderfully vivid and I love the final one. A vibrant and creative poem, to be sure!
Such a lovely poem, and such an original use of the prompt. Beautifully written.
This is a lovely Magpie!
your use of colors and emotions are combined beautifully!
Lovely images and colors here. Thanks for sharing this poem.
I loved this, especially the first 3 lines ... just gorgeous, a delight to read!
You have such an amazing way with words - to conjure up images and to set ideas free-floating in the breeze. What a brilliant read.
You have a special gift - beautiful poem and quote.
Delightful, Gautami:-)
this was just gorgeous ... yes, gorgeous ...
This piece made my hands itch to get into some moss and soil. Looking forward to spring and garden.
Beautiful images worthy of the Royal Purple. :)
I love the idea of yellow stars thrown in.
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Nice! And you managed to kill two birds with one stone on prompts, too. (Clever girl.)
=)
I love the first stanza!
Purple and green with yellow stars thrown in. This is lovely.
"Painting the rusty hinge into flower bed." That image alone made this a standout, Gautami! Great take on the prompt - I think you got me started on Carry on Tuesday, so thanks!
Here's mine:
http://sharplittlepencil.wordpress.com/2011/03/16/if-i-had-the-money/
Peace, Amy
Gautami, this is a beautiful poem. I love "Individualitry will peep out of nothing." So true. And you definitely show your individuality in your poetry.
You're wonderfully creative in your poetry.
You paint a lovely picture with your words.
Love it - so beautifully descriptive. A work of art.
Anna:o]
to combine two prompts into something wonderfully individual piece speaks for itself...yes, who are we to judge
Aahh.. really liked the lines in quotes.. very thought provoking!
By the way, I just found out today (from your blog) that you are not okay with being addressed to as G.. And I realized that I have (albeit unintentionally) done that a few times in the past.. So, my sincerest apologies about that, Gautami..
Thanks..
for me this poem does what poetry does so well, help us to imagine what seems other than the everyday way of doing things and living life. very lovely and imaginative!
Lovely poem! I don't understand how you do it!
Best wishes,
Anna
Anna's SC week 45
You are a true artist of words.
You spin and you weave and you cast vowels and syllables out carefully and end up with tapestry of substance and beauty that surprises me each time.
I'm curious what your background is?
You are really an incredible writer.
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