I look at you both-
entwined in the throes of love,
musty scents of which reaches out to me.
I envy you, your freedom-
your free spirits mingled with each other.
oblivious of my staring,
you are lost in the vast space of each other.
each of your pores incite me
but I am trapped in my smile.
"maestro made me a legend,
giving me glass eyes"
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Mona Lisa by Da Vinci does not need any introduction. Her smile has fascinated many, and few cynics think of it as fake. But everyone has some kind of reaction after looking at the painting, her smile. I think of her as a trapped soul. This is a raw work, needs to be edited. I will eventually get around that.
23 comments:
What a cool perspective!
What a write...Gautami..you added to the enchanting smile..
Very interesting slant...great job.
Very interesting take...her smile is indeed a topic for conversation
I agree, what a fantastic perspective you present. Well done.
Gautami, nicely done to the prompts and I love the ending.
Pamela
Nicely done with a superb ending
This is a surprise poem. I am impressed that you put two difficult prompts together like this.
http://judyidliketosay.blogspot.com/2011/03/musty-minutes.html
each of your pores excite me...wow...thats intense...smiles.
Wow! You really did a superb job with the prompts! I love the way you look at things from different perspectives!
if eyes could talk...oh wait, they just did
Peace, hp
http://hpicasso.blogspot.com/2010/10/just-words.html
The power of a prompt: to use a perspective from within a painting. There is a voyeuristic horror story lurking in there somewhere. Marvelous.
You are showing us a different side of you, Gautami, and I find it moving. Thank you.
Gautami,
The M.L. as an onlooker! Interesting take.
Trulyfool
Well...Mona Lisa as a voyeur. This was quite clever! Vb
Excellent take on the subject. Distinctive.
I love the way you turned it around. I'm am looking through her eyes.
A terrificly perspective piece, Gautami.
Ooooooooohh. I love your point of view here!
a creative take on the We Write Poems prompt. I have never envied Mona Lisa though. To me, she always looks like she is hiding something not very pleasant.
Nice, just nice!
I like the way you saw her...very nice!
really like where you went here.....very nice Gautami
excellent. I always enjoy a poet who knows how to get to the essence of what they are wanting to express and convey it with clarity and word-economy. Bravo
Kind regards
Luke @ WordSalad
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