Thursday, May 05, 2011

musically yours

that elegant singer had created chemistry
he was enjoying the interlude
loud music with no substance was more his style
soothing notes were for weaklings
shadows on the walls appeared so normal
were his thoughts grotesque
pyramids over pyramids of it?
his work was all done

"when the opera started again,
he daydreamed some more"

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I edited the following heavily:
pyramid of dreams

24 comments:

G-Man said...

Yeah...
I'd be day dreaming too if I was at the Opera.
Loved your Musical 55 Gautami.
You Rock The Planet
Thanks for playing, and have a Kick Ass Week-End...G

G-Man said...

And I'd also be playing BINGO!!

Brian Miller said...

i am with Gman...actually when was in NYC went to see the Green Day musical was really nice...

Monkey Man said...

Music with closed eyes. Let the mind wander. Nice.

Pheromone Girl said...

Most excellent story, bound in music. I can almost hear it...

Christine said...

I love opera, but I can relate with the daydreaming thing, best stories I ever did write.

vivinfrance said...

I too loved your wry take on opera- going. The earlier version gave me more, but the rvision was tightly written - always to be desired. I had thought on first reading the revised version that 'he' was the singer, which puzzled me a bit.

Dick said...

I love music with a passion, but opera has always passed me by. So if opera is the target, I'm very much in tune with this!

brenda w said...

Lovely, Guatami. I like soothing notes are for weaklings, and can picture the singer.

Kat Mortensen said...

I actually enjoy opera - to a degree. Well, I like a good aria. In truth, I'm more of an operetta fan.

I think your honed-down version of this piece has more power, although the original had some lovely images that could possibly be reincarnated in another poem?

Kat

Mary said...

I can picture this singer too. I like opera music for a while, then daydream too!

Austin said...

That was pretty good, I would like to see the Spiderman one, if it doesn't get shut down!

Blood, Sweat and Tears is mine this week.

Jingle said...

love operas,

music is always a special entertainment in my heart. lovely 55.


Happy Mother's Day to Moms around you. Blessings..

PBJdreamer said...

Opera is hit or miss with me

I like how your words flowed on this


Happy 55!


that is all

flaubert said...

I like the revised version best, Gautami.

Pamela

Eric 'Bubba' Alder said...

I can tell from your words here that you have an affinity for music in many forms. Nice 55, Gautami!

Belinda said...

Great 55, Gautami. I don't frequent the opera but have enjoyed a few. Music fills my life as I'm married to a musician.

Steve Isaak said...

Good, engaging work.

Mama Zen said...

I don't blame him!

Margaret said...

...one too many arias can be a bit trying... !

versebender said...

The opera...one of the artistic forms I just don't get. Excellent write. vb

Tumblewords: said...

Very nice - the form is perfect for the words...

Laurie Kolp said...

Bravo... bonne bouche... encore, please!!

M. A. S. said...

soothing notes were for weaklings is so fantastic!