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| Picture Credit: Walter Parada |
in the labyrinth of computer peripherals
he stays awake
chasing the sleep away
sleep wants to sizzle in him
deep into the inner nakedness of his soul
(what you see here is just a projection)
those tiny hairs on his body stand out
fully charged yet so sleepy
still he chases it all away
with single mindedness
those keys interest him more
the screen holds him in the throes
the reflection in the mirror sizzles for him
red silken sheets behind him tell us a sensual tale
"let us leave it on him to finish it for us
while he waves it at us as a red flag"
28 comments:
That computer can be so seductive...
=)
I fell the same way about my laptop. I feel his pain.
Our devices seduce us away from life. The new red flag in relationships...
thank you for the glimpse of the worst. Hopefully his victory involved more than himself...
great wordsmithing.
hehe...perhaps it is time to cut the computer off...smiles.
them dam inner nets!i often get lost myself...miles to go before i sleep.nice!
Stunning writing!
Computer addict that what we have all become, ask my girlfriend
I often lie there in bed, wanting to rekindle my hands to my keyboard, I must fight my thoughts and go to sleep.
as a very surreal edge to it
"(what you see here is just a projection)"
That is seriously cool.
That computer isn't called "Hal" by any chance, is it???
I like the modern experience laced with the image in this piece, nice write! ~ Rose
Captivating and intriguing. I really like mention of "red silken sheets." Ah, what a waste of seductive fabric.
xoRobyn
great twist on words for the photo.never thought of computer.
Nicely done!
Innovative and interesting take on the prompt. Very cool.
a special way to look at the computers.
thanks for sharing.
:)
Beware of all living computers! Great writing! Good twist with the prompt as well!
Creative take on the prompt and wonderful topic! Beautiful =)
I know I'm truely stuck to my computer and iPhone, which is like my little mobile computer! That picture is great!
Timely, effective.
Just wow.
A double image for me and a very compelling one! So the poet is drawn to the computer and the image and struggles to be released from both but fails. Terrific write!
That's so good. I can relate!
I always enjoy my visits...your imagination is so vivid and your creativity is unparalleled. thank you for sharing your gift with us.
computer is of the most seductive thing, it hooks everyone.
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We love creativity, your input is valued.
Cheers.
Happy Friday!
Hope to see you in!
I'm amazed at what you came up with from that photo.
Wow. Aren't you amazingly clever! Where in the world did this come from? Your imagination and visualization is just incredible! I'm impressed that this gem came from such a simple prompt.
Impressive.
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