Soap skids on damp skin
I slowly watch its descent
the lather too in its wake
I see a bubble form
I wish to blow it away
the translucency of the skin beckons me
(no, it is not narcissism)
I am incensed with that very thought
"when you pour water on yourself, I almost die"
22 comments:
hehe...nicely played...the last line of course led my mind elsewhere...
Very sensuous. But where is your prompt?
A sensual poem. Did you create a prompt for it?
Good use of the prompts.
Yes, very sensual..there is something so wonderful about being in the tub..nothing to do with vanity..it's just a lovely feeling..Jae
What prompt is it?
Very nicely put across...the essence of the verses seem well done..Nice!
The sensuous thought of a hot lathered shower, definitely leads one to mislead...;)
Beautifully sensual, Gautami. Was this to a prompt or did you do your own thing? Either way, this is gorgeous.
-Nicole
Day dreaming in the bath tub much?
I can feel the water an soap as you describe it...not narcissism...no, gratitude for a wide awake moment...that's what this would be for me anyway.
Ooooh, yes, that last line made me catch my breath! Very vivid images.
ooh very sensuous poem
WoW! Bubbly sensuality...nice!
I love this clever take on the prompt. Lovely images, too!
wonderful images. and so deliciously sensuous.
Sensual and lovely!
Yes, water can be so sensual can't it? I suppose it is a reminder that we came out of the primaeval ooze!
Well...you always create wonderful endlines..Gautami.. yet another beautiful write from you..as always....
nicely done Gautami...and great ending
Great job =)
Aptly titled. Ripples.
Nothing is prompted!
You have demonstrated your ability to see beyond the obvious,obviously!
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