Wednesday, May 18, 2011

translucency

Soap skids on damp skin
I slowly watch its descent
the lather too in its wake
I see a bubble form
I wish to blow it away
the translucency of the skin beckons me
(no, it is not narcissism)
I am incensed with that very thought

"when you pour water on yourself, I almost die"

22 comments:

Brian Miller said...

hehe...nicely played...the last line of course led my mind elsewhere...

vivinfrance said...

Very sensuous. But where is your prompt?

imnotaverse said...

A sensual poem. Did you create a prompt for it?

earlybird said...

Good use of the prompts.

jaerose said...

Yes, very sensual..there is something so wonderful about being in the tub..nothing to do with vanity..it's just a lovely feeling..Jae

Fiducia said...

What prompt is it?
Very nicely put across...the essence of the verses seem well done..Nice!
The sensuous thought of a hot lathered shower, definitely leads one to mislead...;)

ravenswingpoetry.com said...

Beautifully sensual, Gautami. Was this to a prompt or did you do your own thing? Either way, this is gorgeous.

-Nicole

Jarvis said...

Day dreaming in the bath tub much?

LauraX said...

I can feel the water an soap as you describe it...not narcissism...no, gratitude for a wide awake moment...that's what this would be for me anyway.

Linda Jacobs said...

Ooooh, yes, that last line made me catch my breath! Very vivid images.

Fear Not the Darkness but What lies Within said...

ooh very sensuous poem

Andy said...

WoW! Bubbly sensuality...nice!

Laurie Kolp said...

I love this clever take on the prompt. Lovely images, too!

Jessica Prescott said...

wonderful images. and so deliciously sensuous.

ayala said...

Sensual and lovely!

oldegg said...

Yes, water can be so sensual can't it? I suppose it is a reminder that we came out of the primaeval ooze!

Ramesh Sood said...

Well...you always create wonderful endlines..Gautami.. yet another beautiful write from you..as always....

Wayne Pitchko said...

nicely done Gautami...and great ending

mindlovemisery said...

Great job =)

neil reid said...

Aptly titled. Ripples.

gautami tripathy said...

Nothing is prompted!

Watersprite said...

You have demonstrated your ability to see beyond the obvious,obviously!