Saturday, May 05, 2007

Consciously Bottomless----Terza Rima----Sunday Scribblings

Sunday Scribblings prompts us to write about ocean.

As I live in Delhi, ocean is only something to dream about in my day-to-day life. Whenever I get a chance, I prefer to go to the sea rather than mountains. Sea beckons me no end. The vastness, the never ending, the bottomless ocean calls out as nothing does. Ocean conjures up mixed thoughts…too many…sometimes those thoughts are indecipherable….merging into each other…The sea can accept anything. It returns that too. In ways, we do not understand. Sea is unconquerable.

Oceans set us free. Oceans humble us. Oceans consume us. There is a beautiful world in there on the ocean beds. Ocean fascinates me no end. I can watch the waves breaking in to rocks for all eternity. Sea reminds me of eternity.

I write the following, comparing the mind with the sea. Both are so different yet the same. One we can see, other we cannot. Depths of both can never be fathomed in our entire existence.

It might appear a little vague to some. As I wrote it only a while back, I am offering it raw and unedited. Nowadays, I think I am on a editing break!

Consciously Bottomless----Terza Rima

as if eternally etched there, constant is but
moving around, breaking into serrated ed
of the brain, vastness of those thoughts just

about turn around, hitting at the wedges
of time already passed, nonetheless effect
the convoluted shells in the mind’s ledge-

each crevice fills leaving no space. reflects
of the cogitation left behind, still have power
to mar. conquering the mind doesn’t affect

the spirit, as untamed as it can be, towers
over, looking down with disdain at weakness
of consciousness. bottomless psyche showers

more of intellect, energizing the body. bleakness
disappears, like anything dropped into the ocean
is accepted, returned in some other way, uniqueness

retained yet different. slightest of change within,
understanding with wisdom to be calmly serene.

More trips to ocean...


polona said...

this ebbs and flows like the ocean... like it!

iamnasra said...

Hey How are you loved the write up but I have to come back and linger more... Its been hectic over here but will email this week trying to put my act togather ...LOL

Anonymous said...

Where would we be without it? I think we came FROM it.

ShellyAnn said...


Unknown said...

You chose the most perfect words to conjure up the force that is the ocean. I am glad to know that you are touched by the sea.

sage said...

I should do this sunday scribblings--I spend most of my youth near the ocean--but right now I'm brain dead, but tomorrow is Sunday so we'll see. Good writing!

gautami tripathy said...

Polona; That was one of my intent but I did not think I suceeded. Thanks.

masra: You come any time. You are welcome.

colleen: I agree.

pigeon: thanks.

tori: we all are touched by the sea in different ways.

sage: Start writing! The brain will function. THose prompts do help in our writings. At least I make some effort to write!!

Rob Kistner said...

I was taken into a very interesting ocean/mind experience when reading this work Gautami. Most engaging indeed. Well done.


Anonymous said...

That poem was really striking...I could see the images approach and recede like the waves.

Tikkis said...

The ocean;
when you are eagerly heading
towards the horizon,
and when you reach it,
- or you think so,
beyond it is opening a new,
waster horizon.
And there we ought to proceed!

Crafty Green Poet said...

I think its my favourite of your poems. It does flow like the ocean and i like the slight vagueness to it.

Beaman said...

I agree with crafty, the slight vagueness is perfect for a piece about the ocean. Your words and sentences are like waves washing over the reader and then receding, then returning.

'...the convoluted shells in the mind’s ledge...' I love this imagery!

Very nice poem.

AngelConradie said...

thats lovely! incredible imagery!

Anonymous said...

such a perfect choice of form, and so much in this poem. I loved "the vastness of those thoughts just about turn around" and "the convoluted shells in the mind’s ledge" in particular, as well as the idea of the ocean accepting, returning, and transforming a little each time. i enjoyed this so much.

Ces Adorio said...

Gautami, first of all, your command of the English language is quite extraordinary then your poetry is just wonderful. You truly are an inciting and insightful blogger.

tricia stirling said...

congrats on taking an editing break!

paula said...

I can tell you are a peaceful person just by your attitude about the ocean. What you wrote to preface the 'real' writing was wonderful too.

Anonymous said...

The sea sounds beautiful! And I love the imagery in your words.
I've never been to the ocean either. I live in Canada, very close to the shores of Lake Erie.
Your writing is lovely.

Amber said...

Your words fit the ocean's power. I also love it, but at the same time the huge powerfulness of it always envokes respect from me, as well. It is so big, so much energy.


Steve said...

A wave of emotion just hit me on an ebb.

Kai said...

very nicee.

rel said...

You've captured the essence of the sea and the mind; work with it don't try to conquer it. Go with the flow, as they say.

Unknown said...

Makes me want to go for a walk on the beach (only a lake here but it is a big enough one that I can pretend).

Tammy Brierly said...

You did a beautiful job bringing the two together. The ocean is all that and more.

paris parfait said...

It's interesting how the ocean has such a powerful effect on so many - no matter how far away from it we might live.

Steve Isham said...

The ocean is a rich metaphor with many faces, both impersonal/savage, and heart wrenchingly sublime/comforting.

sage said...

thanks for the encouragement, my scribblings are up!

strauss said...

The sea certainly is a depth of fascination, as you have described. It can be aligned with so much of what is found in life, it appears no one is immune to its wonder nor its drawing power.

poetmama said...

Beautiful exploration of the water and the mind.

"like anything dropped into the ocean is accepted, returned in some other way," - Love it!

You have a way with words.

PS. thanks for visiting my blog.

floots said...

i like polona's comment
i am never far from the sea - in reality and in my thoughts
thank you

Anonymous said...

Great post-both your comments and the poem. I really like the poem.

Anonymous said...

"Oceans set us free...humble us...consume us..." Absolutely. Both your prose and your poem capture the power, contradiction and complexity of the ocean so well.

gautami tripathy said...

Thanks friends, for your continouous support via comments, opinions and encouragements.

Ocean has diffeent effect on different people. But we all agree that the ocean is complex, eternal and fascinating. The same way the mind is. Hence my villanelle.

get zapped said...

I love the flow to this, and yes the ocean is one powerful source, just ask any surfer ;)

WithinWithout said...

Wow, Gautami...

What a beautiful poem and I SO agree with you about the lure and magic of the ocean, even more than mountains.

Where I live, we're landlocked in the middle of one of the largest land masses on the planet.

Mountains, too, are thousands of kilometres away. I'm a windswept prairie boy, which partly explains the allure and wonder about the ocean.

You have said this your poem and in your preamble.


trinitystar said...

Perfect in the raw Guatami

Water always beckons me ... yet I do believe that all forms of nature
draw my attention.
hugs for you

Keshi said...

Nature the PUREST in this world.


Anonymous said...

Mmmmm I like it.
This was my favorite bit: like anything dropped into the ocean
is accepted, returned in some other way, uniqueness
I would love to see those lines superimposed on a lovely photo of the sea.

Clare said...

You have such a beautiful way of bringing words and feelings together!

Don Iannone, D. Div., M.Div., M.A. said...

Great one. You should publish a book of your poetry. It is really that good.

Contact me is you want some tips.


Frieda said...

thanks for your comment on my blog. Thanks for introducing to your blog, enjoyed your words! :-)

gautami tripathy said...

Thanks folks. Hugs for you all. Keep coming...:D

don: I have thought of publishing lately but it is not easy as it seems. There are no takers for poetry. I won't give up though.

I will get in touch with you.

ozymandiaz said...

Ah, the ocean, it offers relentless mystery. Like a waking dream, so much lurks beneath the surface.