your kiss is melting
the chocolate in my mouth-
your tongue sweep for tiny pieces
entangled between my teeth.
my teeth try to bite yours-
my tongue wants to throw the
intruder out which is bent on
stealing the sweetness.
traitor like, those crevices
open up, letting you rob
each single molecule of
those aching flavours.
i am left with tasting it
from yours, tongues
enmeshed fighting for
a bigger share.
40 comments:
Wow! I've never seen one like this. :)
Very titilating and "tangy" sweet Gautami -- I like very much!!
I wanna kiss like that! :)
Keshi.
andrew: Now that is saying something! Thanks..
rob: I like the word "tangy" used here. Thanks..
keshi: You will..:)
Actually this did make me laugh, because it reminded me of a recent kiss.
Like teens french kissing for the first time... Cool.
Em.... Hmmmm.....mmmm.... What a poem to come across first thing in the morning. Quite woke me up! Wonderful.
Forget humour, if you continue writing like this I will be more than happy. *Wipes brow* :p
What an amusing idea. I liked it!.
My, my. That's some kiss. I think a bigger bag of chocolate will be needed. You know, to practice. :)
Rose
xo
Oh, I found it humorous in a fun sexy way.
This does remind me of a particular kiss when I was trying to impersonate "the lady and the tramp" kiss with the spaghetti string using a twizler. Very well written and so much imagery. Kisses like that are always memorable. Great poem.
Room for one more??? I love it!!
A very sensuous poem indeed!
YUM!
What a fun poem - I really liked it.
this sound like something my husband would do....
I don't know which the lover wants more... the kiss or the chocolate.
Very nice!
Such an interesting take on humor and so passionate and sugary too ;)
In the film Devil's Advocate, Al Pacino, as Lucifer himself, says that Love is
"Overrated.
Biochemically no different than eating large quantities of chocolate."
So you may be on to something.
sweet sensual kssssssssssssssssssss
:o)
crafty: Hmm. Glad it made you laugh. It should at least solicit a smile..:D
blondie: For chocolates, adults can behave like kids. It is allowed.
greenishlady: Gee, thanks!
beaman: Just wait and watch, buddy!
nancy: Why not try it..:)
rose: I entirely agree with you.
ozymandiaz: That was the idea.
chris: your critique is always welcome.
pat: there is!
regina: Isn'tit just?
pepek: yummy!
lisa: I am glad you like it. Welcome to my blog.
tracie: why not ask your husband..?!
get zapped: Thanks.
h.e./donn: Same kind of chemicals are released. That is a proven fact.
trinitystar: Yes!!!!!!!!!!
not exactly funny but delightfully sensual!
I love the images,action,and feeling in this, with teeth and tongue kissing yet fighting over the chocolate. And it's really cool how the chocolate starts out in your mouth, but then it all ends up the other mouth. Very clever and very enjoyable to read!
Thank you for linking my blog to yours!! That is so cool!
Fascinating chocolate exchange.
I loved this -- it's described very well!
How can you say that's not humorous? I was laughing with the visualization. Good poem Gautami
Nice! Now this is a fun poem.
Thanks for adding me to your list of links. I will do the same!
I don't think I've ever kissed while eating chocolate before - and I agree with some of the others, I found it quite amusing.
sounds good to me :)
WOW! WOW! WOW!
Loved it!
Nice to be back here!
Missed all your great poems!
Hope all is wonderful in your life!
Busy, busy, busy for me.
Thanks for your comments. The chocolate tastes good..:D
Now this brings to mind some nice memories ;)
I like this one, Gautami. Chocolate kiss, eh?
By the way, I read the quote you added to your photo and profile. We can win the battle when we simply set the battle aside.
Gautami:
Tantalizingly tasty and sweet!
But why DON'T you write something humorous? You do seem like a very serious soul, but you're very witty!
did bring a smile
Thanks bookbinds, don, within without and Magic eye.
Chris, I thought I had fixed my serious mask properly. It has slipped it seems..:D
I do write witty poetry but those do not come when asked!!
gautami,
You may not have intended this to be a humorus poem, but for me the dueling tongues twisting in each others mouths for the sweetness of the chocolate struck me as quite amusing. ;-)
rel
I like the title: how the word rolls liltingly off the tongue, and in that way, becomes part of the imagery of the poem itself.
rel: this was indeed a tongue in cheek poem. I wanted the readers to judge it the way they wanted to. Thanks.
chicklegirl: I like the title too..thanks
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