Saturday, July 11, 2009

that thin line

in those stones
between the cracks
I see history
written pictorially
the marks in the crevices
speak of a fallen world
I gently rub my thumb
it glistens like jade
I move around it
thinking of cymbals of time

when you call out to me
I am amazed to see myself
in a skyscrapper
staring out of the window
to a place that doesn't exist
in my hand, I am holding
a stone, that jade one
I had rubbed with my thumb
when I show it to you, your
indulgence turns to surprise

"voices in my head transfer to yours"

40 comments:

Tanya Gwen Minnick said...

nice post, I liked the imagery of the stone- the jade..I could see the colour of it in my mind's eye..
I liked this.
peace

Old Grizz said...

very very deep, could go in any direction. causes one to think. that's what good writing is all about. my time was well spent here.

Michelle Johnson said...

The jade stone has a strong presence in this poem, for me. Time and space are visited in such a way nothing is lost. Have a great weekend.

Jack Webb said...

Gautami I love this poem. It reminds me of Rilke's 'I live my life in widening circles';
"I still don't know if I am a Falcon, a storm or a great song.
Namaste

Marja said...

Oh beautiful Gautami I love Jade or greenstone as they call it in NZ
The Maories say it has Mana or spiritual powers and energy

Dee Martin said...

mystical and beautiful :)

Fledgling Poet said...

This was awesome...great imagery!

Stan Ski said...

Beautiful symbolic images.

Lucy said...

just love the way u write!

SZH said...

Oh what a lovely poem. YOu have great imagination.

Tumblewords: said...

Jade has mystical qualities and your words do, too!

Mojo said...

We call those "worry stones"... but they're not usually made of anything as exotic as jade. Amazing how the mind can transport you to places you aren't isn't it?

The Dark Lord said...

Your words billow forth and back effortlessly, tugging us along at its wake at breathtaking speed, to propell us into newer dimensions and emotional scope.. the use of jade is superb.. there's a certain mystique in them..
Beautiful creation that goes so deep, and is heartfelt snd poignant, throbbing with the brilliance of the muse!

Geraldine said...

I like your reference to a jade stone. Well done with this prompt.

Donn said...

I would love to get my hands on the cymbals of time and go back.
Indulge me.

Bone said...

The jade really brought color to your words. And these lines especially stood out to me:

I am amazed to see myself
in a skyscrapper
staring out of the window
to a place that doesn't exist

Edward S Gault said...

Sometimes something like a jade stone can help us through a rough patch by being a sort of presence.
Excellent piece!

anthonynorth said...

Straight from the soul, that one.

lostmermaid said...

brilliant as ever !!

Whitesnake said...

This reminds me of Freedom's Place

SandyCarlson said...

The look of surprise made my heart jump!

Greyscale Territory said...

Jade ~ wealth on many levels. A dramatic image to use linking what was and what is!
Lovely secondary illusions haunt this poem too! Cymbals may clash, but may simply be there for attention and importance!
A most ineresting poem!

songofsea said...

This reminded me of my tours to historical places ( i just love it)....very true that you get lost in such indulgences....

lissa said...

feel like a fantasy, like those stories where people travel anywhere by their own thoughts

Maggie said...

Indeed...I feel there is a fine line between time and mind.

spacedlaw said...

I love the surrealism in this, The daydream becoming reality. Or is this the other way around?

Sue said...

I like how you capture the history that can residem wordless, in objects, can be conjured in the mind out of tactile impressions, and transport us out of time and space.

Jeeves said...

Love this one.The layers of history.

Deborah Godin said...

Deep and mysterious, a flash revealed, out of time and place but still anchored. You've layed out these paradoxes masterfullly!

ThomG said...

Lovely, as always.

Nara Malone said...

I feel like I just stepped into an Escher painting.

JP/deb said...

Love those opening lines ...

in those stones
between the cracks
I see history


peace,
JP/deb

Amias said...

You put thinking into a whole new arena ... I love the contrast, especially the "jade stone" .. it's magical.

fourwindshaiga said...

I too, love the mystical tone of this poem.

Jim said...

I liked the second stanza where 'you' are called out of your trance. But did it stop your thinking process?
Thanks for writing this, I enjoyed your transition and the mystic jade stone (I have one of those, in the raw).
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gabrielle said...

Truly inspired, luminous, this one. The eternal circling. The cymbals of time rattle the bones.

if said...

beautiful words!

bluebethley said...

Your close observation of the jade stone opens up worlds of possibility -- and a lovely poem which shifts and circles around the relationship. Another surprise!

Patois said...

This fantasy feels so real. Wonderfully done.

Leo said...

very deep! the last line was absolutely wonderful!