angelically moving
like a belly dancer
who convolutes to a tune
she draped herself into him
her ethereal presence
formulated certain
gentle feelings
in that stone heart
inching towards his soul
he jack-knifed
knocking her
lovely form aside
as soon moribund
naked emotions
took over
progressing
quantifying
regressing
into sadness
like a heavy tomb
of umbrella.
a vellum fell from sky
walls demolished
x-axis of their love
intersected at y and z-axis.
"Love has to be three dimensional or may be four"
22 comments:
Hello Gautami,
A soft, gentle and sad poem. Clever to have had it already written!
Each word works in its place -- great job.
Clever, witty and fun to read.
I enjoyed it!
Excellent poem!
wonderful work, Gautami! and you got the whole alphabet in there as well!!
Really impressive.
You are brilliant. You can even write a poem just through alphabet.
Awe, everything must intersect somewhere. This is beautiful. Hope your arm is feeling better today.
What a lovely abecedarium!
You've recycled words from a previous prompt and made it work.
Wow...Like all dimensions here
I love how you bring your mathematical prowess into play, as well as your words!
Can't imagine how you do this, it's awesome, you're very talented, impressively so, arm better today?
Nice one. And isn't it a good feeling to follow own rules and to succeed at least?
Best wishes
Ralf
i would definitely say this fits the bill for our dictionary exercise. this is executed wonderfully, the bolding of alphabetical missives a nice touch. beautifully worded. -lawrence
Especially enjoying the final lines: "x-axis of their love /
intersected at y and z-axis."
The entire alphabet! Lovely.
Lovely! I think your words really leave the reader with a sad, romantic feeling.
somewhat sad....another nice poem
"Love has to be three dimensional or may be four"
Well that is taking things ta a whole new level....E=Mc squared.
Loved flowing along with your music in this poem!
This flows as I imagine dancing with my love. (You wove those prompt words in seamlessly.) Well done!
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