Wednesday, September 02, 2009

it was not a dream, certainly not a memory

flat gleam of water stared back at me
i had a vision of flash photograph taken on a grey day
glare of my inner monsters drowned themselves out
it was not a dream, certainly not a memory
yet it was luster of truth in some unknown form
That threat was gone now
along came a calm acceptance
with your words told to me long ago

"you and I will live together...
just as long as you need me,
which won't be forever"

23 comments:

Jeeves said...

How do you manage to write such wonderful ones!

maglomaniac said...

good one Gautami.
Finishing part was the best
"which won't be forever"
Said so succintly yet so much.

~Harsha

Greyscale Territory said...

Beautiful emerging of irony!

Crystal Phares said...

Absolutely beautiful.

ThomG said...

This is absolutely gorgeous. I mean, the thoughts and feelings just pour out of these words.

anthonynorth said...

Deep and thoughtful. Excellent.

venus66 said...

Something that I can relate.

Sepiru Chris said...

I love the "vision of flash photograph taken on a grey day" after flat, gleaming water. You set up the images and pour it all forth, from there. Kudos.

Just someone said...

I can't think of what to say - it is just great! I love all the emotions gone through; sadly, nothing is forever!

You are an amazing poet:)

illyria taylor said...

marry me. I mean that was chillingly beautiful. Yeh, that's what I meant to say.

Americanising Desi said...

the ending just did it all for me!

too good!
The Glare of Threat

Donn said...

"you and I will live together...
just as long as you need me,
which won't be forever"


Most Mammals are NOT monogamous, that's more of a bird thing, so there is a lot of truth in those words. There is much to be said about pair-bonding, our species has done well by it.

Of course both genders are magnificently designed to cheat and spread the genes around but gosh darnit we love that Romantic angle. Where would we be without the notion of never ending love and living happily ever after?

Lucy said...

so perfectly worded! we've all been there too.. promises never kept.
great job

Stan Ski said...

Understanding of the final statement would prevent so much heartache.

Jessica GC said...

Had to read this over and over and over again because it's so good! Love the title as well. Just beautiful.

Ann (bunnygirl) said...

Just lovely. "Not forever" is, sadly, our reality.

Andy Sewina said...

Hi Gautami, sorry to hear that the narrator has inner monsters, I hope they get better soon.

Great little thought provoking rhyme at the end, bringing the reader back down to reality, and shattering his dreams!
<3

Sweetest in the Gale said...

Wonderful read, as always...

asleeponmyfeet said...

Very interesting read. You're no amateur!

pjd said...

Beautiful balance between vague and detailed, with a complete story behind the words. I love the wordplay with light and water images, flash and serenity... a really complete work, this.

Kim Nelson said...

Lovely!

Tumblewords: said...

Nothing is forever - how true! Nice flow between abstract and hindsight emotion.

Mark said...

You always come up with such wonderful pieces...