Photo: Rick Mobbs
somehow my swimming senses
make me perceive as if
clouds percolate from the sun
I fly out stealthily
all the while entangled with you
my astral body steals a kiss from it
desiring to share it with you.
you pick up my movements;
eagerly reaching out for me
your hands flutter to hold me close.
I can see you flowering
right in front of my still closed eyes
with the lightest of your touch
I sway with feelings
and burn up to cinders;
my last thoughts, before
I completely disintegrate
"you achieved what the sun could not"
29 comments:
Hi Gautami, I'm right there with you, flying in the Astral - at the speed of thought. Love the wonderful picture too!
Even at a distance of 93m miles , I still feel too close to the sun., but wouldn't it be good to float up and touch it, just once?
Oh wow!
This is probably my favorite piece I've read of yours.
Did i make a comment a few posts ago about being dark?
This was beautiful girl......
Going as if fuelled by a super nova!
The Sun will be Kaput in a few Billion years and all of this will be gone without a trace...except for the pulsations that will travel to infinity.
With that in mind I want to thank you for making my stay most enjoyable...I love coming here to see what can be done with words...
you're a magician.
Thanks.
Hot stuff! A gorgeous pairing of poem and picture. Thanks for visiting mine.
The title adds another dimension to the painting, and your poem just follows it perfectly
Gautami -
This, for me, is your most free most sensual poem I've read to date -- superb... ;)
Truly mystical!:)
The last line is great.....very metaphysical, ha ha.
Ooohhhh and a much better way to go than burning up in the sun.
Oh, I love this poem, the delicacy, the power of a woman's light touch.
Ekphrasis is a wonderful thing, especially Rick Mobbs style. That is a lovely drifting kiss poem, perfectly inline with the painting.
Absolutely beautiful! I love the last line.
I really like 'swimming senses'
That was a good write up...
Yo know at times, I wonder what and how it would be to live on sun...shining on the earth and calling myself sunshine :)
This is visually stunning!
wow, your powerful and sensual words complement the picture so well
Someone else called this sensual, and I have to agree. This is gorgeous, woman.
You derived a great title from the painting ... and please don't disintegrate for too long :)
A dream of fire and air is also based on this painting.
just found robb's paintings... they are awesome... i have to agree this is one of yr more sensual poems that enhances the painting... i too enjoy the title and the last line brings it in for a landing... so to speak... to collide w/another prompt the line i can see you flowering was subtle and sweet...
Tami, Ooo la la hot stuff. You are really burning up the poetic world. Does your mama know? lol ;-) Just kidding. This is wonderful and beautiful. Very sensual.
love you,Melanie
a lovely image to attribute to your lovely poem. Thanks for sharing an inspiring artist.
This is such a lovely write...goes wonderfully with the painting.. :)
Great use of painting and poem - you're really making contact with the 'love' lines!
The use of the word "percolate" is dynamic. It becomes the power driving the sound, sense and whole feel of the poem. Lovely!
Terrific!
gautami, you really soar with this one! A beautiful love poem, both grounded in details and surreal in content. Lovely!
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