pet peeves
admiring the gardens,
what do I truly see
blossoming flowers,
fruit laden green trees-
dandelions blooming
along with sweet peas;
puddle of rain water
or is it my pet's pee?
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This is a re-worked post. I thought it suited the prompt rather well. As I seldom write anything light like this, now I wait for brickbats..:)
22 comments:
Well, you made me laugh. No brickbats from me.
None from me either. Your take on the theme is not dis-similar from mine.
None from me either. thank u for the point of view..
OK - not a brick-bat but a small nit-pick - do you really need that word "truly"?
otherwise it is fine.
I like it,
Very clever wordplay.
Excellent!
What fun! I like the pun and the spirit of this piece. (There's that "pee" sound again...!)
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Full of whimsy! Pee happens!
Could be both!
Gautami, how marvelous a play on words! LOL! :D
Ha! I like this!
this made me laugh out loud :)
You are funny. This does not deserve a brikbat. It is quite amusing and oh so true.
It made me laugh. You used rhyme to good effect!
LOL Love that funny surprise ending.
This was great Gautami! Loved the ending. The link worked fine, that you left over at MPP. Hope that's the end of the problems, stopping by here. The last couple of times, everything went wonky!!! ;<(
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Nice rhyming scheme. The ending surprised me, really funny.
*grin* Very clever!
brick bats? what are they?
I guess ya lightening up just a little...........
and that is cool........
sweet as!
a bit like you......
Ok ya want brick brats....
It had no substance...
It flowed like a mudslide ..all over the place...
the words used didn't even come close to what ya tried to say....
the stanza was not existant
the spelling was terrible...
oh and to top that off I didn't get
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Other than that I thought it was great!
Pets do give us their all! A puddle of pee is wonderful! Especially, outside in the garden!
Chuckle!!!!!
the last line is a killer :-)
light hearted smiles... dandelions, everywhere...
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