I rub my chin
reflectively with the
back of my hand--
each single pore of yours
is doorway to heaven
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reflectively with the
back of my hand--
each single pore of yours
is doorway to heaven
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# 9:45 pm(India time): I have been participating in a 24 Hour Read-a-thon. You can check my progress here! Hence I have neglected this blog of mine. I have not been visiting you all. I intend to remedy that ASAP!
27 comments:
This poem makes me think we are in many ways a a reflection of those around us--and most significantly of those closest to us at heart. Thanks for sharing this lovely work.
Your poem highlights how intense the closeness between two people can be.
Your poem makes me wish I had someone who felt that way about me.
Certainly interesting.
Wow, I love your take on the prompt! Right on!!! =)
The rubbing of the chin is often a reflective pose of wondering or decision making... sometimes a hesitancy... to enter the door? Lovely.
gautama, yours and mine seem to express a similar feeling! Great minds... :)
Very reflective, yet passionate.
i think you did very well with the tanka
yes, this is well done. :)
oh yeah - love.
Great! I like the reference of your own skin to counter the pores of the other - very intimate in a nonsexual way.
Yep, that's a tanka.
The narrator truly cares for her lover on every level.
An excellent love poem
-Thank You.
good to hear from you
I think it is wonderful!
Nice work, as usual! You do well with all forms...
I think it is wondeful, too.
Very sensual and sexy! I like how your linked the word "doorway" back to the origibnal post on OSI. Very clever!
I really enjoy the images this poem generates. Very nice and thought provoking
that's great. pores, doorway to heaven. nice. very thought provoking.
oh, I love it. simple, yet it says so much.
More and more I read in your work words of love and tenderness. Tami, well done.
love you,Melanie
Wow! Amazing!
I can imagine the magnitude of love.:)
Lovely... I like the physicalness of the expression (not sure how to explain what I mean) - that makes the emotion more intense and real. A read-a-thon sounds like an interesting idea. Hope it was fun.
an every day initimate moment brought in close for all of us to see... did well g...
Aw, this is great!
I know how that feels. :D
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