you stuck that fork into a lemon
I can't look at it now
you made the sourness disappear
I don't have affinity for bitterness
what do you carry in your satchel
you fidget when I ask for it
I will not mention it again
if you share that glass with me
"whose blood came out of lemon,
or is it only reddened tears?"
19 comments:
Sweet, bitter and a wonderful slice of darkness on the side..Jae
A great take on the pic.
When heart bleeds, tears are red.. I loved where you reached..
Oooh, great ending! And that first line is intriguing! I'm still thinking about it.
Ooh very well done!
you dish dark words with perfect bitterness ..
Sheilagh Lee said: dark and delicious!wonderfully written
Sharing that glass ~ solves so much.
Very mysterious... I like it!
reddened tears - interesting thought. Nice piece!
Mudering a lemon? Hmm... different!
Love the ending. Makes me think it would make a wonderfully surreal country song.
Very good use of the prompts within a highly readable and enjoyable poem.
beautiful.
Ooohh...deliciously dark..and so full of suspense... and both these criteria are every high on my list! :)
A great read, Gautami!
I wonder if that glass was ever shared...
Gautami,
I myself would have shared the glass.
(Perhaps it's a hybrid: a 'blood-lemon'?)
Trulyfool
Well done but, of course, you've left me full of questions...what was in the satchel...did he share the glass with you.
Mine is at:
http://rnsane.blogspot.com/2011/03/magpie-tales-55-its-not-nice-to-eat.html#links
By the way, I watched the movie,
"No One Killed Jessica" last night
( I love Indian films ). Very sad.
Gautami, I did not see this one coming out of those prompt words. The image alone was startling enough, but the idea of the bleeding lemon (heart), the bitterness as physical and spiritual... great! So glad you took on this prompt.
Amy
so packed with emotion.
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