Sunday, March 30, 2008

laughter lines-----One Single Impression



on crumpled piece of paper
with a crayon, I sketch you-
no adornment in your ears,
eyes filled with laughter-
your hair pushed behind
the ears, you look almost
demure, your full lower
lip belying that fact. In
simplicity, beauty of your
soul is reflected in your face.
I see you running towards me
falling onto me, holding me
tight. I crush that paper
throwing it into the bin.

"I would rather keep you
within my heart, now
that you are gone forever"






Photo credits: http://www.elfwood.com/art/h/a/hanson/laughter.jpg.html

32 comments:

J. Andrew Lockhart said...

the ending was a surprise to me.... wonderful work

Nasra said...

I loved it ...

Hope you are well ...

Just Jen said...

You draw very well, very very well :D
With no adornment she still looks great with her smile!

Just Jen said...

wait, i thought you drew that, my apologies, too early in the morning for me

SandyCarlson said...

Heartfelt and powerful. Thanks!
Writing in Faith: Poems

STP said...

You have captured deep love and love lost fully.

spacedlaw said...

Wonderful.

Barb WillThink4Wine said...

Oh, how tragic! Leaves me wondering if it was your first break up or a death.

gardenpath said...

Sad, but very nice!

Susan Helene Gottfried said...

Oh, yeah. I know that pain.

This is one of the few times I think I'm lucky I can't draw.

lissa said...

kind of sad but very sentimental and sweet

Raven said...

Beautiful and touching.

Vixen said...

Very moving and powerfully written. Thanks for sharing.

Riversongs said...

Beautiful picture and powerful words.
Thank you for sharing.

dsnake1 said...

this is very moving, and beautiful. i know that feeling, but sometimes, i do try to sketch.

MyBellavia said...

Speaks of pure love and loss at the same time. Beautiful!

Thanks for pointing out the spelling mistakes! I am definately challenged in that area! Especially so early in the day! Lol

January said...

Beautiful sketch and poem. Yes, the ending was a surprise. Thanks, as always, for sharing.

tumblewords said...

Ah, the ability to remember laughter is indeed precious!

polona said...

very beautiful and moving

Kai C. said...

beautiful
love it:)

Whitesnake said...

Beautifully put as only you can.

zoya gautam said...

still lines
but not without
unpredictable
mood-swings
parabolic and hyperbolic
trajectories
sometimes tangent
at other times
dots in a straight line..
searching
for what is
or what is not..!

hi gautami../z.g.

Joyce said...

That is very sad.
So ironic that remembering her laughter brings you sadness . . .

Rae Trigg said...

Wow. Laughter and sorrow mixed. Very well done.

the teach said...

A beautiful prose poem, gautami! I love it! And yes you did succeed!

Patois said...

At first, I'm so happy, and then I'm so sad. Nicely done.

Teri C said...

Just beautiful and poignant!

Andrée & Michael said...

Oh my goodness. There was not a clue that this would end so sadly. I am stunned, with a few tears. I hope to be remembered like this, though. I want to yell, grab the paper out of the trash: don't do that! You'll regret this later!

qualcosa di bello said...

unexpected & powerful words!

Billy said...

A great prose poem--and yes, I agree, the ending is superb!!!!!!!!

One More Believer said...

ohh, that is so good!!... the good and bad of love written well..

yertle said...

Wow, very powerful capturing the feelings well.