on crumpled piece of paper
with a crayon, I sketch you-
no adornment in your ears,
eyes filled with laughter-
your hair pushed behind
the ears, you look almost
demure, your full lower
lip belying that fact. In
simplicity, beauty of your
soul is reflected in your face.
I see you running towards me
falling onto me, holding me
tight. I crush that paper
throwing it into the bin.
"I would rather keep you
within my heart, now
that you are gone forever"
Photo credits: http://www.elfwood.com/art/h/a/hanson/laughter.jpg.html
30 comments:
the ending was a surprise to me.... wonderful work
I loved it ...
Hope you are well ...
Heartfelt and powerful. Thanks!
Writing in Faith: Poems
You have captured deep love and love lost fully.
Wonderful.
Oh, how tragic! Leaves me wondering if it was your first break up or a death.
Sad, but very nice!
Oh, yeah. I know that pain.
This is one of the few times I think I'm lucky I can't draw.
kind of sad but very sentimental and sweet
Beautiful and touching.
Very moving and powerfully written. Thanks for sharing.
Beautiful picture and powerful words.
Thank you for sharing.
this is very moving, and beautiful. i know that feeling, but sometimes, i do try to sketch.
Speaks of pure love and loss at the same time. Beautiful!
Thanks for pointing out the spelling mistakes! I am definately challenged in that area! Especially so early in the day! Lol
Beautiful sketch and poem. Yes, the ending was a surprise. Thanks, as always, for sharing.
Ah, the ability to remember laughter is indeed precious!
very beautiful and moving
beautiful
love it:)
Beautifully put as only you can.
still lines
but not without
unpredictable
mood-swings
parabolic and hyperbolic
trajectories
sometimes tangent
at other times
dots in a straight line..
searching
for what is
or what is not..!
hi gautami../z.g.
That is very sad.
So ironic that remembering her laughter brings you sadness . . .
Wow. Laughter and sorrow mixed. Very well done.
A beautiful prose poem, gautami! I love it! And yes you did succeed!
At first, I'm so happy, and then I'm so sad. Nicely done.
Just beautiful and poignant!
Oh my goodness. There was not a clue that this would end so sadly. I am stunned, with a few tears. I hope to be remembered like this, though. I want to yell, grab the paper out of the trash: don't do that! You'll regret this later!
unexpected & powerful words!
A great prose poem--and yes, I agree, the ending is superb!!!!!!!!
ohh, that is so good!!... the good and bad of love written well..
Wow, very powerful capturing the feelings well.
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