Thursday, March 27, 2008

creatures of eerie night

In that eerie night, moonless and scary
lake reflected the dark sky, like a tapered glass
I could hear the scary sounds of rustling
moss, the kelp, the zebrafish, the very mice and flies,
These tiny, humble, wordless things --
how shall they tell us lies?
What had made me come here in the first place
walking through a country of gray sponges and silent boats
that too alone without a torch,
my heart was chilled, body so taut
sooner or later drown in the indigos of darkness,
but now, for a while,the roughage
of fauna held my feet down,
my heartbeat could be heard a mile away
Invisible twines entangled me
can't you just imagine my predicament-
Where your face burns and tickles with the cobwebs
of deathly unknown creatures of the night
in to the panicky feeling I surrendered
myself for the inevitable ending,
my head
spinning, splitting apart.
Something fell heavy
on my feet.
Jolted, I picked up my book.

"interestingly, I had become a character
in that book I had been reading, in my bed"

This is offered for Totally optional prompts (Novel?) as well as patchwork poetry. Lines
have have taken from poetry by Catherine Faber, Federico Garcia Lorca, Mary Oliver and
Robert Frost, in that order, and patched into it. Click on the links to read the whole poems.


World So Wide said...

"... I had become a character in that book I had been reading, in my bed" - spooky how that happens when you're totally immersed in the world of a book!

anthonynorth said...

An excellent novel is like existing in an alternative life.
It takes your mind away to play.

Stan Ski said...

Novels and dreams - hard to distinguish sometimes

Gemma Wiseman said...

A most interesting post!

Novels are all part of life's experiences. We can't help but be inluenced by them in some way.

And so, it is but a tiny step, to sometimes slip into their tapestry!


Tumblewords: said...

Ah, there's a recognizable feeling! Strong piece...a mini novel! Amazing how you pulled all the parts together for such a novel poem!

WH said...

I had never heard of patchwork poetry. This is fascinating... and a good read!

Cassiopeia Rises said...

Tami, this is wonderful. Very clever to weave the actual words from the poem within your own.. What an eerie stage you have made of it.


Linda Jacobs said...

Oh, this has happened to me so many times! Love how you wove the other lines of poetry in! Very clever and talented!

Whitesnake said...

You should take up "cross stitch" and I am not talking about sewing!

Andy Sewina said...

Clever stuff, I couldn't get my head round the patchwork thingy - but I like what you did with it. Also, the ending of the poem - loaded!

paisley said...

i was here earlier,, and realized i had not finished my patchwork poem and took off to do that before i commented...

this is a very good take on the prompt... i was all ready to believe it was a dream......

gP said...

stories within stories of stories. loved this.

Unknown said...

I like how you weaved them into their separate existence.

Anonymous said...

What an interesting and clever use of the prompt! I enjoyed reading it and loved the lines, "I had become a character in that book I had been reading, in my bed"

Anonymous said...

You created something entirely new from the lines. The poem reads like a scene from a fantasy movie,or a bizarre dream, until the surprise ending. Great way to capture being so absorbed in the dream of the book.

I particularly enjoyed reading the Robert Frost poem you selected. Fun, huh?

Anonymous said...

Know what you mean.

Watch what you read!

Anonymous said...

Ah, to be startled from a good story and be confused for a moment that you aren't in the book after all!

Unknown said...

This poem is so atmospheric!

I love the multiple mini-lists, long enough to make up a rich scene to set the poem in, but not so long that they catch the poem up and make it cumbersome to read.

Anonymous said...

Am absolutely fansinating poem you've created this week.

Anonymous said...

Yes, the other lines of poetry have been woven in so well, lovely.

Junius said...

how can they tell lies...good one... :D

Crafty Green Poet said...

I can be totally captivated by a novel too. You wove the patchwork lines through this very well

UL said...

wow,really nice...hey there's a gift awaiting you at my space, hope you will like it, i havent been able to come by to visit regularly, but wanted to let you know that you are in my thoughts.

polona said...

i love how you wove those lines into an amazing work... great ending!