Monday, March 17, 2008

numbing nirvana----read write poem/monday poetry train


photo credits: Carmi. Do click on his name or the picture and get to his blog. He takes awesome photos!



brittle branches bent over
with weight of weather,

snow forms a cover over green earth-
protective or damaging,

depending on how one sees.
looking with misted eyes
at hazy images of my neighbourhood trees
standing tall, not giving in to chill;
I think of emerald warmth-

a fleeting image receding as quickly.
shivering a litle,
I shed a few more tears,

which dry on me
by forming icicles.

numbness can only bring nirvana

I am rendered senseless,
my last coherent thoughts being,

"another new day, brightening sun
can only bring new life,
a few leaves on my branches

will make me alive in no time"

before falling apart on hard ground.
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34 comments:

Susan Helene Gottfried said...

Those branches got to you, too, huh? I don't know if you saw my comment to Carmi, but they made me think (as does your poem, now) of my trip to Yellowstone over New Year's.

Man, I can't get that trip out of my mind. Seems like you guys have it there, too.

...deb said...

Beautiful images (photo and poem)...so bittersweet with that last line.

I like the title, it's from my favorite line.

Rhian said...

i love this one... the symbology is powerful.

Jill said...

The cold that brings numbness, but for once that numbness is welcome because it seems to be the only way to ease the pain...Love that imaginery.

Julia Smith said...

This is great:

'I shed a few more tears,
which dry on me
by forming icicles.
numbness can only bring nirvana'

And I do love that photo. Love the soft focus background.

BreadBox said...

That's a lovely piece, as is Carmi's photo!

N.

(and as to your question, I've been incredibly busy with work, with origami, and with watching politics!)

noahthegreat said...

This was beautiful.

Kai C. said...

this piece is excellent.
great imagery

WriterKat said...

Very pretty. Protective or Damaging - nice tension there. The tears forming icicles is a great image.

artpredator said...

cycle of life--timely now that spring is about to be sprung!

Crafty Green Poet said...

I enjoyed this, specially the emerald warmth and the numbing nirvana

paisley said...

it makes me think about how distressing winter cold must be if one is a tree...

Jane Doe said...

Beautiful and so well written!

P.S. I started a new writing prompts blog if you'd like to participate.

Jane's Inspirations

Steve said...

Put together so well.

Scribbler said...

Bravo!!! Simply awesome. Liked the imagery.


Keep it rollin;)

Leigh Lear said...

very nice

Jo said...

Lovely, very bittersweet.

anthonynorth said...

The reality of life. Have it, and eventually it's not there any more.
But it's beautiful while it lasts.

Joy Renee said...

it is all in 'how one sees' isn't it? I keep bumping into that perspective.

haunting imagery in this.j

thanx for visiting.

Rose Dewy Knickers said...

Gautami, this does cool things down. :)

I think trees have a lot to teach us, but we refuse to listen.

Rose

xo

P.S. I posted twice more today. ;)

Christine said...

I also sense in this poem how the power of thought can transform us. Wonderful photo to illustrate your poem.

Missy said...

You have such a way with bringing words to life. This is a wonderful poem. Thanks for sharing.

LaurenceMcBeth said...

I too loved the same lines as Julia...tears drying and forming icicles is such a wonderful use of words...gorgeous..

Linda Jacobs said...

I like how you give this tree a personality! You have some great lines in here!

Ann said...

Beautiful poem (and wonderful photo). I think we're all ready for spring. :)

noni said...

yes...very effective pic to ur poetry......
montage of words and visual...

totomai said...

we often take for granted what these trees feel... excellent images and words to it

Billy said...

Yes, I agree, great imagery here. You have great work. I'd be happy to exchange links.

UL said...

The title is what drew me here...and I knew it would be superb.. and it was.

lissa said...

what a wonderful perspective

seb said...

beautiful pictures ... both the photo and the poem.

writerwoman said...

Wow, really unique and the last stanza lingers.

Lirone said...

Beautiful - I love the way the winter seems to get more and more unbearable until numbness sets in.

polona said...

wonderful tree's lament...