Monday, May 04, 2009

opposites

my love notes to you
over the years
all undated
LIE IN WAIT FOR YOU
to be dated
for all those years lost
to be noted: love still exists

Give
The NaiSaiKu Challenge? a try!

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Honour Rolls

Neatly he counted out the coloured cards, making a stack of it on his side.
Seeing there were more of the red streaked ones, satisfied, he grunted out loud. Only few more to go, and he would graduate to a professional killer.

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15 comments:

Jeeves said...

Excellento....just too good..

Whitesnake said...

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Still word verifaction......sigh

anthonynorth said...

Yep, it's always around somewhere.

Michelle Johnson said...

A very early good morning to you~ Your poems are wonderful. I especially liked the ending to the Am. Sentence. And, how both poems come together seamlessly even with their different context. Well done. Have a nice day.

Lorraine said...

didn't check that one, but the previous was a total recall for me...an old card to a would-be lover, with name and stamps...still waiting for new address ;)

Rajlakshmi said...

the first one is so so touching... simply brilliant... totally loved it...
the second one is beautifully penned... loved how u hv ended it...

Andy Sewina said...

Brilliant! I can feel the anticipation here!

Julia Smith said...

Honour Rolls - spooky!

Your NaiSaiKu Challenge is really amazing.

Unknownwriter and Almost Lover said...

excellent..:)

Linda Jacobs said...

I like how you tweaked the Naisaiku. The subtle differences are genius!

Janice Thomson said...

Love that first one - superb writing Guatami!

AdellBeek said...

I wonder if a date really matters when it comes to love. I like how love changes everything, and I enjoyed your poem.

Amy said...

Nicely written on both accounts. If I think too hard about them, I start to make sinister connections between the two.

sarah said...

Brilliant as always. The second one seriously creeped me out - which of course is a good thing!

polona said...

you do excel at naisaiku.
and the sandwich... wicked (in a good sense)!