my love notes to youover the years
all undated
LIE IN WAIT FOR YOU
to be dated
for all those years lost
to be noted: love still exists
Give The NaiSaiKu Challenge? a try!
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Honour Rolls
Neatly he counted out the coloured cards, making a stack of it on his side. Seeing there were more of the red streaked ones, satisfied, he grunted out loud. Only few more to go, and he would graduate to a professional killer.
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15 comments:
Excellento....just too good..
Ok.send em now my addy isd.............jkdhkjfiuyierigjkbjbv
Still word verifaction......sigh
Yep, it's always around somewhere.
A very early good morning to you~ Your poems are wonderful. I especially liked the ending to the Am. Sentence. And, how both poems come together seamlessly even with their different context. Well done. Have a nice day.
didn't check that one, but the previous was a total recall for me...an old card to a would-be lover, with name and stamps...still waiting for new address ;)
the first one is so so touching... simply brilliant... totally loved it...
the second one is beautifully penned... loved how u hv ended it...
Brilliant! I can feel the anticipation here!
Honour Rolls - spooky!
Your NaiSaiKu Challenge is really amazing.
excellent..:)
I like how you tweaked the Naisaiku. The subtle differences are genius!
Love that first one - superb writing Guatami!
I wonder if a date really matters when it comes to love. I like how love changes everything, and I enjoyed your poem.
Nicely written on both accounts. If I think too hard about them, I start to make sinister connections between the two.
Brilliant as always. The second one seriously creeped me out - which of course is a good thing!
you do excel at naisaiku.
and the sandwich... wicked (in a good sense)!
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