Saturday, April 23, 2011

from one room to another

from one room to another
I walk miles
in the inner sanction of my mind
you lock me in your pendant
I am outside with my words.
which reverberate the time
from the tiny window
I see the life force
locked in your horns
trapped inside a vacuum

"let me create melody from meaningless sounds"

24 comments:

flaubert said...

Just gorgeous, Gautami, and I love the ending.

Pamela

Dr. Pearl Ketover Prilik said...

Beautiful swaying poem....lovely movement...wonder if you wrote sanction instead of sanctum of the mind intentionally or inadvertently ...obviously both would carry different meanings...lovely to meet you..

if you do visit my blog today ...My entries are of a rather uncharacteristic silly nature.... Please feel free to skip about

gautami tripathy said...

@Dr. Pearl: I wrote sanction, never even thought of sanctum....

Paulami said...

loved your poetry and even i thought you meant sanctum. despite that i feel each of the words would have given beauty to these words..

you just got yourself a new admirer :)

Whitesnake said...

I do hope the dust settles soonest

Mary said...

Excelent, Gautami. One CAN walk miles right within one's own mind. So many rooms.....

http://inthecornerofmyeye.blogspot.com/2011/04/to-god.html

Amanda Moore said...

just beautiful really that last line is fantastic and haunting!

teric said...

Beautiful and moving. Love the imagery you provoked.

Ramesh Sood said...

Yet most of the time we find ourselves busy..finding meaningless sounds..even in melodies.. thanks Gautami a lovely poem as usual..

Rawknrobyn.blogspot.com said...

The poetry flows so beautifully with the words you choose.
Be well.
xoRobyn

Harshad mehta said...

One walks infinite distance in mind.

Anna said...

Lovely poem.

It is interesting to weigh words. To change just one word can change the whole meaning of a text.

Best wishes,
Anna


Anna's SC-51-Harvey's Place

Felicity said...

beautiful
especially "you lock me in your pendant"

Sweetest in the Gale said...

Such beautiful words and imagery...loved this.

Jingle said...

trapped in a vacuum, wow.

powerful write, you rock.

Happy Sunday.

cj Schlottman said...

The image of being locked in a pendant is strong and concrete. Well done.

Namaste..........cj

my secret innuendo said...

let me always create melody from endless sounds.. my words flow to me too as my melody. love your writing

Kim Nelson said...

I read this several times to tease out various meanings. I suspect we all have walked such journeys, and with many different outcomes. I like the conclusion you drew.

Here's mine:
http://www.kimnelsonwrites.com/2011/04/25/relativity-of-time-and-place/

Jingle said...

walk miles in a room...
wow.

A++

you rock, girl.

Nonna Beach said...

Wow, walking through your mind... that was deep...I love it !!!

Shanae Branham said...

Deep...I am glad that I found the time to drop by from g-man's 55.

Jenny said...

Beautiful words.

haiku love songs said...

amazing imagery. beautiful.

SandyCarlson said...

You are an amazing writer. This is some poem!

Your prompt border comes up at OSI this Sunday. Please send me a poem and/or image I can post!