from one room to another
I walk miles
in the inner sanction of my mind
you lock me in your pendant
I am outside with my words.
which reverberate the time
from the tiny window
I see the life force
locked in your horns
trapped inside a vacuum
"let me create melody from meaningless sounds"
23 comments:
Just gorgeous, Gautami, and I love the ending.
Pamela
Beautiful swaying poem....lovely movement...wonder if you wrote sanction instead of sanctum of the mind intentionally or inadvertently ...obviously both would carry different meanings...lovely to meet you..
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@Dr. Pearl: I wrote sanction, never even thought of sanctum....
loved your poetry and even i thought you meant sanctum. despite that i feel each of the words would have given beauty to these words..
you just got yourself a new admirer :)
I do hope the dust settles soonest
Excelent, Gautami. One CAN walk miles right within one's own mind. So many rooms.....
http://inthecornerofmyeye.blogspot.com/2011/04/to-god.html
just beautiful really that last line is fantastic and haunting!
Beautiful and moving. Love the imagery you provoked.
Yet most of the time we find ourselves busy..finding meaningless sounds..even in melodies.. thanks Gautami a lovely poem as usual..
The poetry flows so beautifully with the words you choose.
Be well.
xoRobyn
One walks infinite distance in mind.
Lovely poem.
It is interesting to weigh words. To change just one word can change the whole meaning of a text.
Best wishes,
Anna
Anna's SC-51-Harvey's Place
beautiful
especially "you lock me in your pendant"
Such beautiful words and imagery...loved this.
trapped in a vacuum, wow.
powerful write, you rock.
Happy Sunday.
The image of being locked in a pendant is strong and concrete. Well done.
Namaste..........cj
let me always create melody from endless sounds.. my words flow to me too as my melody. love your writing
I read this several times to tease out various meanings. I suspect we all have walked such journeys, and with many different outcomes. I like the conclusion you drew.
Here's mine:
http://www.kimnelsonwrites.com/2011/04/25/relativity-of-time-and-place/
walk miles in a room...
wow.
A++
you rock, girl.
Wow, walking through your mind... that was deep...I love it !!!
Deep...I am glad that I found the time to drop by from g-man's 55.
amazing imagery. beautiful.
You are an amazing writer. This is some poem!
Your prompt border comes up at OSI this Sunday. Please send me a poem and/or image I can post!
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