Sunday, April 10, 2011

poetic vacuum


yellowed thread of that green balloon
entangles your pauses,
you find vacuum in my knees-
the gap between my feet and ground,
you fill it with sensual poetry.

24 comments:

Jerry said...

wow, tight and inviting. I got sucked in.

dustus said...

Entangles your pauses. Certainly has that feel to it. Enjoyed the way you implement this style. Very effective.

Monkey Man said...

Great flow and rhythm with this Sunday 160. Cool that you combined the two challenges. Thanks for playing along again this week.

brenda w said...

I love the vaccuum. I read your piece before really looking at the picture. See her float afterwards was a delight! Thanks for this Sunday morning treat.
~Brenda

Brian Miller said...

wow...you open up quite a can in a few words...big smiles.

Linda Jacobs said...

I love how the yellow thread entangles your pauses and that the gap is filled with sensual poetry!

quid said...

Beautifully illustrated, delicious little poem!

quid

Stan Ski said...

Gravity defying post!

flaubert said...

Love it, Gautami, perfect to the photo.

Pamela

Jingle said...

super beautiful.

Amropali said...

i love the way it ends.
The fun colors and the poetic depth merge beautifully.

Beachanny said...

This, I thought, was an appropriate response to Brendan's poem today. Sensual poetry..filling the spaces. Wonderful piece..I liked "entangles your pauses" too.

SweetTalkingGuy said...

Phew, you got me bouncing off the pavement!

<3

Mama Zen said...

"Entangles your pauses." That's fabulous.

Steve Isaak said...

Love the first four lines of this: stunning stuff; solid finish.

jessicasjapes said...

Nice phrasing here. You give a little but leave us a lot to add ourselves. Cute!

http://jessicasjapes.wordpress.com/2011/04/11/evolution-in-a-nutshell/

bendedspoon said...

fabulous :)

Breathing Between Apathy and Perfection said...

I read your info, then a few of your poems, and I can totally see the mind of a mathematician in your beautiful, calculated poems. Thanks for sharing!

honeyhaiku said...

Ok, seriously this is fabulous. I am enrapture by the play and beauty here.

fiveloaf said...

great write! mines here~ http://fiveloaf.wordpress.com/2010/06/18/natures-gravity/

Jingle said...

love it.

A++

Rene/ Not The Rockefellers said...

sensual poetry is something that is good for me :)

get up, get up, get up...

lucychili said...

the gaps are where
the wonder lies =)

UmaAnandane said...

Interesting Input.Liked it!