Saturday, May 14, 2011

prickly pines

scented leaves of pine
make me pine for you
thorny needles prick me
that droplet of blood 
is it an omen?
I believe it isn't 
red clay of the earth 
has another story to tell
hush little baby, don't you cry
this isn't goodbye, this isn't goodbye
in orange-grey light, dews do sign bright

"pining pines shed their needles, 
pricking me again and again"

19 comments:

Amanda said...

Strong poem. Just like the writer.

Addie Duck said...

I certainly agree with Amanda. This poem has great weight and is filled with concrete images. Well done!

Namaste..........cj

cj Schlottman said...

Whoops! I put Addie's name where mine should have been. I have started a blog for her and am managing it. Sorry for the name confusion. I will link using my name until she is ready to take over....................cj

upinthecosmos said...

Beautiful imagery!

flaubert said...

Gorgeous poem, Gautami.

Pamela

Anna :o] said...

LOvely write.

Anna :o]

anthonynorth said...

Yes, great imagery in this.

Laurie Kolp said...

Great poem, strong ending!

Andy Sewina said...

I love the goodbye repetition, and there's an 'other world' feeling coming through strongly.

<3

jeff campbell said...

Wow! very interesting poetry...well done! Peace and blessings

Judie said...

I agree with Andy. I like that repetition within such a strong piece.

Rawknrobyn.blogspot.com said...

This was really rich. I especially like "This isn't goodbye. This isn't goodbye." Very powerful.
xoRobyn

Sue said...

This was my favorite part:

hush little baby, don't you cry
this isn't goodbye, this isn't goodbye

Really nice.

=)

Dave King said...

It works for me. Good rhythm.

Porky said...

Strong sensations, and a carrying away to a magical space.

The Woodswoman said...

opportunity nicely achieved ...

Ames said...

A very visual and moving poem!~Ames

Nonna Beach said...

Excellent poem !
I love how you brought nature in to represent mood of the piece.
Brimming with emotion, tension and a sense of happiness at some future time ! ( I have to hope it will be so...)

Jenny said...

Powerful. Strong. Multi-faceted. Amazing.

Wow. Love your visualization.