scented leaves of pine
make me pine for you
thorny needles prick me
that droplet of blood
is it an omen?
I believe it isn't
red clay of the earth
has another story to tell
hush little baby, don't you cry
this isn't goodbye, this isn't goodbye
in orange-grey light, dews do sign bright
"pining pines shed their needles,
pricking me again and again"
19 comments:
Strong poem. Just like the writer.
I certainly agree with Amanda. This poem has great weight and is filled with concrete images. Well done!
Namaste..........cj
Whoops! I put Addie's name where mine should have been. I have started a blog for her and am managing it. Sorry for the name confusion. I will link using my name until she is ready to take over....................cj
Beautiful imagery!
Gorgeous poem, Gautami.
Pamela
LOvely write.
Anna :o]
Yes, great imagery in this.
Great poem, strong ending!
I love the goodbye repetition, and there's an 'other world' feeling coming through strongly.
<3
Wow! very interesting poetry...well done! Peace and blessings
I agree with Andy. I like that repetition within such a strong piece.
This was really rich. I especially like "This isn't goodbye. This isn't goodbye." Very powerful.
xoRobyn
This was my favorite part:
hush little baby, don't you cry
this isn't goodbye, this isn't goodbye
Really nice.
=)
It works for me. Good rhythm.
Strong sensations, and a carrying away to a magical space.
opportunity nicely achieved ...
A very visual and moving poem!~Ames
Excellent poem !
I love how you brought nature in to represent mood of the piece.
Brimming with emotion, tension and a sense of happiness at some future time ! ( I have to hope it will be so...)
Powerful. Strong. Multi-faceted. Amazing.
Wow. Love your visualization.
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