Saturday, September 11, 2010

I watch while the mountains crumble

a piece of flotsam in the passing
why am I seeing it from afar
my hair plastered to my skull
salt sticks into me
that abrasive feeling does not leave
when did my feet get webbed
when did I sprout wings
the ocean sleeps in front of me
sky is running away
that flotsam is a piece of a mountain
the world is unusually calm
while I accept the gift of peace


"I wanted to be the last redwood, now I pirouette with the jinx"

34 comments:

Deborah said...

while I accept the gift of peace ... lovely!

vivinfrance said...

truly surreal. Your last line is wonderful.

Susan B. Evans said...

This on is really, REALLY beautiful! You have such a gift with words!

anthonynorth said...

That's quite a last line. Excellent.

Systematic Weasel said...

An excellent post! A truly surreal piece with a definite and outstanding last line! =)

-Weasel

Fay's Too said...

I'm trying to find words to describe my reaction to yours. This bypasses my brain and goes directly be my soul.

Elizabeth said...

If we all stood still and just for a moment, became the last redwood, I wonder, would it stop us?

Elizabeth

flaubert said...

Beautiful Gautami! I love the hope is this! And I love the new look :)
Pamela

flaubert said...

oops! in this!
Pamela

Wayne Pitchko said...

not much to add Gautami....wondeful as usual

EKSwitaj said...

a striking transformation

Kodjo Deynoo said...

I am pleased to know your work, I like it when I come across good writers, one always finds something to take from it. Nice work

Christine said...

Beautiful imagery in this poem, Gautami! I especially loved the questions about webbed feet and sprouting wings. :-)

RiikaInfinityy said...

Lovely words :3 and so deep^^~

SandyCarlson said...

Ah, the gift of peace. How it stills us.

The Dark Lord said...

Powerful work - your gift of the words is remarkable! A wonderful read, thank you.

Ramesh Sood said...

Simply superb..as usual..I mean you are so much gifted. God bless!

twitches said...

"salt sticks into me"

GREAT line!

Diane T said...

You are definitely a positive person! I love that so much!

Sweetest in the Gale said...

Absolutely gorgeous words...striking with their meaning. Beautiful!

deowriter said...

Flotsam love that word. I loved this gift of peace.

ρομπερτ said...

The peace would indeed be felt through these "bites and bytes" - thank you. Please have a good Monday.

daily athens

Tilly Bud said...

'I wanted to be the last redwood'...lovely.

Sandra.if said...

I enjoyed reading...so original!

shanegenziuk said...

I thought my stuff was sad. Looks like I'm going to need to turn it up a notch to keep up with you.

JanePoet/deborah said...

wonderful verse ... particularly love the ocean sleeps in front of me / sky is running away

moondustwriter said...

that is a beautiful peace - now when I go to the ocean I will ponder these thoughts of yours

Thank you and also for the thoughtful invite

I will join on Mondays - tho my old brain may forget

Moon smiles

Collective Epiphanies said...

Very nice, a lot of imagery. I enjoyed reading your verse today. A unique piece indeed.

Thanks for stopping by!

swapnap said...

Nice to read you again! It sure does calm when one comes to term with peace.Beauty!

Harshad mehta said...

'Why am I seeing it from afar??'

Can feel that stillness.

Patti said...

I love the last 2 lines of your poem- truly beautiful words~~~

Jim said...

I love to watch those passing clouds which are running away with the sky.

Very nice, Tami. :)
..
Believe it or not, I have taken videos of fast moving clouds passing by.
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Jeeves said...

Your last line....Has so much punch. Lovely poem

oliviasbiopiclog said...

while I accept the gift of peace...
You are so gifted... wonderful lines my friend- Dear Poetic Friend:

I invite you to join us at Jingle Poetry : http://jinglepoetry.blogspot.com/, we have a Monday Poetry Potluck party (weekly) for you to enjoy, the link is open American Central Time 8pm to Tuesday, 8pm. You have 48 hours linking in 1 to 3 poems, you could use an old poem if you don’t have a most updated one handy…

Hope to see you today, please do stop by and check us out.
Let us know when you stop by so that we place your link in our blog list….
Happy Sunday!