nay, I did not say that
not anything anyone need know
how did the whispers get heard
why did the wind spin a tale
plucking from the silky depths
you stand behind that window
your reflection looms large
I stare angrily at that
muttering under my breath
when did you steal my veil
soon your face will get blue,
turning you into an apostrophe
the frames will engulf you
I will keep counting the branches
while you cut out the slashes
"you a faceless entity, hiding behind the city"
27 comments:
This poem is too close for comfort for me. Every line moves me.
yikes....powerful anger
Strong, vivid and more than a little chilling.
Strong emotions in this. I love the beginning: "how did the whispers get heard" ?
Wow - strong poem. Doesn't it feel good to get that out?! I liked this prompt and the deep emotions it allowed to surface.
Angry stuff!
Strong piece! I especially like "turn you into an apostrophe". Well done.
The anger slips into the chilling darkness of spiteful curse! A dynamic piece of poetry!
This one goes rather deeper into the prompt than some of us. Bravo.
Gautami
This is beautiful and the last stanza is so powerful!
Pamela
Your 'editor' might be ducking for a few days, but that won't hurt anything. That slant view can be a wonderful thing, but also exhausting at times.
Elizabeth
whispers & wind!
in life, i really really love those moments when we say, "what was that?" and try to listen carefully to what may or may not be the wind
Excellently crafted, combining prompts! Excellent magpie! =)
-Weasel
Stunning, dramatic, and a chilling poem. Very well done!
Gautami this is a gripping and powerful piece...i can feel the intensity in your words. :-)
I 'second' others' words. And add BREATHTAKING.
the fierce power contained within your words...took my breath away...nice mag!
I like how you put the body with the built environment.
turning you into an apostrophe
What a wonderful way to put somebody in their place!
Your anger comes through so clearly, and yet you portrayed how anger can make you lose your clarity.
scary, angry fear conquering going on here.
Powerful stuff.
Rene
The old expression "Packed a wallop" comes to mind.
hard and hitting !
You've chosen an elegant punishment for someone who misquotes. Definitely the sort of response that takes some time
"turning you into an apostrophe"--I love this line.
I second Erin, "turning you into an apostrophe" is my favorite line too. Such powerful anger and so well done. Thank you for this.
ooohhh/... that was dark and chilling!!
Loved the way you have expressed that sentiment here!
Loved the 'apostrophe' bit - fantastic and vivid!
Well played!!
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