if my dreams get real bizarre
I will get up, pick the jar
into it the dreams would go
churned into bits of guts
I would take the jar into the woods
bury it deep in the soil
let worms encircle it
worms of volatile dreams inside
earthy worms on the outside
a beauteous sight for the twisted me
I fix a demure smile
pretend to slip on the tiles
my jar smashes on the floor
nightmares escape everywhere
it won't offend me at all,
if you leave bits of glasses right there
as I love to watch footsteps of blood
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The first line is taken from the lyrics of you tube clip (fireflies – owl city)
36 comments:
Frightening to picture nightmares escaping everywhere. And worms...eewww. Written well to the prompt.
A gruesome finale, Gautami! but I like the bizarre dreams being trapped in the jar.
worms are great source material, great prompt use!
Sweet...I love the idea of dealing with terrible situations non challantly...amazing.
Cheers!
I would don my analyst's hat for this, but she was wearing it when she ran out. This seems like the vengeful side of the childhood: nobody loves me everybody hates me. I'll go into the garden and eat worms.
Oh, and I like it, especially the "accident. "
That is fabulous. Such great imagery, and you pull us right along. Nice pacing, nice rhythm. Love this. If my dreams get real bizarre, this is what I'm gonna do.
Quite vivid and creative, excellent!
This is amazing. I have such boring, inorganic dreams.
I would take the jar into the woods
bury it deep in the soil
let worms encircle it
The images are so visceral —that I could easily let the pictures materialize in front of my eyes.
This is great. Where can I find both a forest and a jar that will take care of my bad dreams???
Love and Light,
S
Gautami this is fantastic!
Excellent take on the prompt!
Pamela
Bizarre dreams fitted into a jar, leading to other dark places and all with a dream woven feel about it. Really good use of the prompt, Gautami,
Elizabeth
Yikes! This sure got my attention, Gautami. All the elements that frighten! This is a bad dream!
I too liked the concept of dreams inside a jar. I like that Fireflies song as well. Good work!
You've painted such a disturbing yet fascinating, vivid picture with your words. Cheers!
This is so creative! Love your imagination!
Wow. You found the same as me, our three words call for a dreamy landscape. Very well done.
Enjoy the frightening imagery and that speaker of poem delights in/does relish release of nightmares into real world, despite thought to protect people with burial of evil/badness. For me, poem speaks well to individuals who deliberately release evil into a shared world. Brava
I love the idea of this, and how your writing tied it all together.
(Love the new blog template, too.)
I like the way you stay close, very close to the line you borrow from the song. It's bizarre that the jar of dreams and nightmares twist the soul of your speaker in the poem.
Vivid imagery.
very raw... which I like in its way
This poem took my breath away! Nice work.
Hi, I came across your comment on Shane Genziuk's blog so came over to have a look-see. Great stuff. My kind of poetry - I really like this one and will take a tour tomorrow! Take care.
I too thought of the childhood rhyme about worms as did pwf. A child's fascination with garden critters and earthy worlds somehow adds to the twist of nightmare. But the last couple of lines represent the true grit of gross nightmare! Fascinating piece!
love the idea of nightmares shattering everywhere... and the demure smile. well done!
Oh wow, Gautami -- this is an amazing poem. The imagery, so evocative and shiversome, works so well on multiple levels. It's the kind of poem which begs to be read out loud.
Nicely bizarre. You spin a wormy spell.
Demure....I Love It!
This stanza - THIS stanza...
>> churned into bits of guts
>> I would take the jar into
>> the woods
>> bury it deep in the soil
>> let worms encircle it
Love it!
I like where you went with this, but feel sad that your dreams are scattered.
I loved the lines where earthy worms and worms of volatile dreams come together.
And you were against word verification once,I remember.
~Harsha
Very good, very vivid. Nice one
Very creative , that! Enjoyed it..Nightmares escaping here and there..could go and hide under pillow..
Both macabre and sureal at the same time. This reminds me of a song "Human Behaviour" by Bjork...namely the video. The dark forest, the strange creatures...I could almosy picture her carrying a jar of nightmares out there.
-Nicole
I can not come up with a word to describe how much I like your words Gautami.....I will just read it once more and let it sink in...and I do like you new photo also....
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