I see it in flea market
wrap it in an old newspaper-
a snuff box-
denoting my snuffed out feelings,
send you whimsical note-
letting you know of tarnished hope
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Why don't you try something in 160 characters? Space included!
Update: I corrected it to flea but I think flee too worked well. What do you think?
31 comments:
How sad, Gautami. But very whimsical!
What a poignant little piece. Delightful.
That's so sad.
Yes, sad but definitely whimsical.
Very sad but an AWESOME 160!
Mine is here
Happy Sunday!
hugs
shakira
perhaps they can add a bit of polish for your tarnish...smiles. things do remind us and bring tactile qualities to our memories
my 160
Wonderfully but sadly whimsical!
You'll have a good sneeze and get over the whole sad episode!
At least there is some tarnished hope.
Nicely wrapped 55
Moon smiles
So sad but very well done!
nice..little and beautiful.
By the way, i have tried to write poem in 14o letters.:
How wonderful it is;
When a long forgotten name brings
a smile,
On the other wise deserted lips.
How could such a creative concept not tug at the heart strings of its recipient. Great Sunday 160. Thank you for playing and hope to see you again.
Beautiful and sad Gautami!
Pamela
Nicely described but sad
Very good, should it be "Flea" market though.
Hey, who let the spelling monkey in? Sorry like I know how to spell!
It's okay you can slap me up the side of the head.
I love "flee" market - fits perfectly with the rest of the story... Nice 160!
A full range of emotions well-expressed.
Woeful, like word pun (flee) which seems to underscore state of events.
Oh wee of little faith!
Short and very whimsical!
-Weasel =)
very good!
Like the language of flowers, a victorian whimsy.
Very emotive Gautami, and I like the word picture you paint. You capture the moment and all those feelings in so little space. Wonderful job,
Elizabeth
Thought its sad, its still beautiful to be completed in 160 words. Gr8..:)
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A complete story told so sparely - lovely work!
Fine blend of feelings and expression
I like that you include the note of hope, tarnished though it may be.
Poignant.
You write about a sad feeling, but I think the creativity powering the thoughts ends on a sign of hope.
Tami, nothing wrong with this poem Sad can be filled with whimsy too. Great read.
Melanie
My great grandmother used to snuff.
Excellent 160, Gautami!! You say so much with this.
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