Sunday, October 09, 2011

alley and valley

music in my mind
flows into yours
intermingling both of us

love clutches my belly

I want to know why
the heart feels that flutter
while I learn you with my body

love clutches my belly

in the essence of you
I fall into overwhelming depths
to rise again to the fore

love clutches my belly

if it goes on like this
I will make that my banner
and post it in an alley

25 comments:

Mama Zen said...

Gorgeous piece!

seasideauthor said...

yes well done.

tinkwelborn said...

very cool poem. I especially I like the closer.
thanks.

Jessica Maybury said...

this is cool :) I liked the refrain. It's true!

Shawna said...

I love this, especially your first stanza.

Brian Miller said...

while i learn you with my body evokes quite an intimate picture...

Paige said...

"while I learn you with my body".
- a honest and fulfilling way to
learn someone.

zongrik said...

the thought of proclaiming your love in an alley...hmmmm...interesting.

ed pilolla said...

make it your banner. i liked this very much:)

The Orange Tree said...

touching and visual.
love it.

Mary said...

I love this. The repetition works well to enhance your message.

shawnacymariekiker said...

brilliant. this has the feel of a rumi. something exquisite and just slightly above the rails.
your refrain is amazing and every word in between.
very much appreciated this, this morning.

Kerry O'Connor said...

It beautiful exploration of love and commitment.

Morning said...

sweet.

Happy Picnic.

ShonEjai said...

Beautiful poem. I love the first line especially then it just got better from there. Well done

Helen said...

You composed a great poem for Poetry Jam this week!

Susannah said...

I love the repeat of "love clutches my belly." And "while I learn you with my body" is wonderful!

Sherry Blue Sky said...

I especially love "I will make that my banner and post it in an alley."

Tiaden said...

what a great little poem. There seems to be a lot packed into a small space here, brilliant!

Abin Chakraborty said...

fascinating stuff!incisively insightful.

Abin Chakraborty said...

fascinating stuff!incisively insightful.

Kay L. Davies said...

Beautifully done. I love the idea of the banner.

Kay, Alberta, Canada
An Unfittie’s Guide to Adventurous Travel

The Bug said...

Lovely love poem. My favorite part is the last stanza :)

Marian said...

"love clutches my belly" really says it all. what a lovely line.

Ann LeFlore said...

I hope you do make that banner and post it in the alley that would be great
http://gatelesspassage.com/2011/10/10/the-bird-of-love/