Tuesday, October 18, 2011

a cross

Rage by AnnaMariaDeMari at deviantART
don't look into my insomniac eyes-
seemingly so, 
(I sleep like a log)
that cross on my forehead-
a mark I acquired 
when I fell down from the stars
but what of it?
I look like a fallen angel
with my gelled hair,
and unblinking stare
that air of haughtiness
you could never fathom my indomitable spirit
(just a fact I state)

"when I walk on the earth again, 
I find bliss in my obscure state"

20 comments:

Maude Lynn said...

Love the language in this!

Daydreamertoo said...

Wow, powerful write indeed. I'm not too sure I'd want to meet them on a dark night though, having fallen from Heaven.....LOL

Brian Miller said...

nice...i feel the strength in your voice...

Claudia said...

falling down from the stars...yes..there is strength in your voice - love the play on the title as well

Rallentanda said...

You're coming a drift triple toes.
No one can look haughty with gelled hair:)

gautami tripathy said...

Rallentanda: Don't you know I don't like being addressed as anything other than Gautami?!

Jeff said...

Neat poem (and I like the photo and the "fallen cross).

lynne said...

Very strong words here.. well done!!

Barbara said...

I do enjoy those asides. Like lemon candies.

Judy Roney said...

This is so cool! She does look like a fallen angel in this picture.

Beachanny said...

Falling down the stars - that's some fall, a cross on her forehead. She is indomitable. Watch out! Interesting write.

Ravenblack said...

Quite a voice of authority and strength -- don't judge or underestimate. :)

Maxwell Mead Williams Robinson Barry said...
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Maxwell Mead Williams Robinson Barry said...

you have a way with words.

fantastic piece.

mareymercy said...

Lovely!

irene said...

Intrigued by your lines.

Alex Dissing said...

I like this one, a lot. Powerful words.

Promising Poets Parking Lot said...

fabulous expression.

http://promisingpoetsparkinglot.blogspot.com/2011/10/agreement-for-thursday-poets-rally-week_19.html

join us with a poem of your choice today, bless you.

Jingle Poetry At Olive Garden said...

amazing piece.

Vivekanand M said...

Can almost feel the glare :)

http://thesecondquartet.blogspot.com/2011/09/sea.html