Friday, October 07, 2011

peripherals

you stand so aloof
yet the stillness of your body
throbs against my own

************

I rub my chin
reflectively 
each pore of yours
is doorway to heaven

heaven I find
deep in your eyes
iris reflecting
I caress your spine

haunted by your scent
I house myself
in periphery
of my disintegration-
amalgamating into you

21 comments:

Margaret said...

agamal... amluga... Ha! I can't even read it correctly silently.

Brian Miller said...

nice bit of word play in that last little bit...

Ella said...

Wow, this was beautiful and unexpected! Well Done~ I love how you did this :D

Monkey Man said...

Very sensual piece.

Alice Audrey said...

Really brings home the impulse to make the two one.

Eric 'Bubba' Alder said...

Like a chorus from the 1980's song: "I'll stop the world and melt with you."

Beachanny said...

These are beautiful and work as haiku in their unexpected juxtapositions. I think you'd be really good at writing tanka too. They use nature imagery to arrive at the same feelings of love and sensuality that you do here. Really well done!

Nick Rolynd said...

Very nice work. Love the tone of the entire thing, but I also like how each piece evokes slightly different feelings. =)

G-Man said...

Gautami....?
That was HOT!!!
I love this side of you
Thanks for sharing
Have a Kick Ass Week-End

Rallentanda said...

Now Now! Now is not the time for tingles, is it triptoes? Fantastic poem...you excel in this genre.

eclipseofthemoon said...

A beautifully written and sensual piece of art....

vivinfrance said...

Delightful love poetry.

Claudia said...

immediately fell in love with the first one

tinkwelborn said...

sensual! this is what I pick up.
each pore a portal to heaven...cool

Your falling into it! there's no saving you; but, maybe you don't need to be saved....it just might be true heaven.

your haiku and poem evokes those amorous feelings I house somewhere back in the recesses of my forgotten subconscious. Yes! I remember what it was like.
And that's what you want...to arouse your reader...which you've done. good job. thanks.

Old Ollie said...

so good - these are excellent

Lolamouse said...

Beautiful and sensual poems. I love what you've done here.

Isabel Doyle said...

very clever response, weaving so much

Madeleine Begun Kane said...

Both are beautiful!

madhumakhi said...

Very sensuous lines.

Hazel said...

Unity in amalgamation!

rch said...

Nice use of the prompt, it's always fun using words in different ways isn't it?