Sunday, October 30, 2011

snaky tales

total darkness
pitch black
which contains eternity
their eyes merge after a while
heat shakes the hearts
slippery slithering bodies
of snakes entangle in knots

25 comments:

Morning said...

tight 160.
Happy Sunday.

Brian Miller said...

eww...that would be a nightmare to fall into a ball of snakes...

Daydreamertoo said...

Oooo Yuck!

abthomas said...

Loved the macabre image you managed to score into my mind!

Monkey Man said...

I hate snakes, but love this 160. Thanks for playing along.

zongrik said...

i like the image of the eyes. if they merged on dice, that would really mess up the game ;)

Cheryl said...

Creepy.

Jo said...

nightmarish ... you have painted and incredibly vivid picture with so few words.

beccagivens said...

This is the first 160 I've read ... I would rather not meet this hole of darkness!! I know there are those who love snakes, however, I am not one of them.

Mama Zen said...

Excellent!

Heaven said...

scary images i don't want to tangle... happy sunday ~

Madeleine Begun Kane said...

A perfectly unnerving poem that suits this season.

Ann LeFlore said...

excellent scary images and well done Happy Halloween enjoy this day and night
http://gatelesspassage.com/2011/10/30/the-witch-is-transformed/

Rosemary Nissen-Wade said...

What vivid images!

Sue said...

Perfect Halloween fare. Snakes and all!

=)

blackswanpoetry said...

very cool

Anna said...

So well written! Excellent!
But so creepy too.
I see that scene from that Indiana Jones movie where he jumps down into a snake pit. So creepy.

I am thankful that there are not many snakes in Sweden and none in Northern Sweden.

Great text. This was not an easy one to do, so you did very very well.
Best wishes,
Anna
Anna's SC wk 78 'A Study in Black'

Christine said...

don't mind them at all, matting balls for garter snakes are harmless, but I sure wouldn't want to fall into one

Bethe77 said...

That would not be fun to me. Dont like snakes. Great write
Blessings

vivinfrance said...

Really creepy, but terrific poem!

Promising Poets Parking Lot said...

fear snakes,

sharp imagery,smiles.

mareymercy said...

Very nice!

AfterTim said...

You fill so much emotion and imagery in such so words. Not a gift many can boast of. Pleasure reading your work, truly.

Titus

Yousei Hime said...

The slight ambiguity leads to other naughty thoughts, especially since snakes often mate in congregational balls like that. Nicely written.

Jenny said...

Yikes. I felt very Indiana Jones here.

Snakes.

Shudder.

But really cool writing.