Afford
Cigarette
Dim
few hours left
of soothing darkness-
only ones I can afford
to converse with night.
pausing, I crush moist grass
between my bare toes.
sharing pocketful of secrets
to last until morning.
I send them up in
smoke signals
from my cigarettes,
before moon gets dim.
**Disclaimer: I do not smoke, drink or do drugs!
27 comments:
I crush moist grass
between my bare toes.
before moon gets dim.
Such beautiful lines--
smoke signals
from my cigarettes,
still beautiful but glaring
You're incapable of not bringing softness to most words
Gautami, your use of details, like the moist grass between your bare toes always pulls me in.
Sending pocketful of secrets in smoke signals is so vivid.
And you know, I loved your disclaimer, grin.
You strike the just the right words. I love your usage of words like - crushing moist grass between my bare toes. Nicely done.
Makes it seem so right. :)
Rose
x
it is good!
I love how you can take something i have an aversion to and make it seem so tempting. Another verse well written.
Well put, Gautami.......
I do smoke, I do drink and they ARE Drugs!
A lovely tome...
And I'm with Whitesnake. I do smoke, I do drink and they are, definitely, drugs.
smoker or no,, it certainly has an air of romanticism around it doesn't it?????
I picture a summer night rendezvous from this...
Ah, I like this a lot!!
nice imagery of solitude and woe when I read it.
i saw the prompt and the cigarette led me offtrack...
so wonderful to see what you've don..the imagery is perfect...
***moist grass
between my bare toes***heavenly!!!
and i echo your disclaimer too :))
As a night owl who still drinks a little, your words perfectly capture
those lonely hours of quiet contemplation and inner conversion I relish all to myself.
Glad you don't smoke...yuck!
Great three word thingie.
xo
Gillian
sounds like my cigars. :)
Sure liked this one too, esp. the disclaimer had me smiling ..thank you. :)
you did well with these words, much enjoyed reading
Christy
Very nice, gautami. you created a contemplative, evening mood.
I thinks it's important for people to realize that we are writers, and what we write about is not autobiographical. I know you wrote the disclaimer about not using unhealthy substances, which is why I say this.
great stuff!...i can imagine standing outside, quietly reflecting, having a puff..best part..wet grass between my toes...
i have never smoked either but i think this conveys the feeling so well...
I agree. These are beautiful lines, Gautami.
The bare toes crushing moist grass, and the smoke signals... great imagery.
"sharing pocketful of secrets
to last until morning."
My old roommate used to smoke and I think this is a perfect description! loved the words!!!
Love this!
I like the bare toe images and glad you posted the disclaimer! :)
A night out with a first love/ date telling secrets. What a beautiful image you have evoked in my mind. I also liked the lines 'pausing, I crush moist grass
between my bare toes.' Thanks for sharing such a lovely piece. Keep up the good work. Have a nice weekend.
Side note- I think the disclaimer really added to this piece. And, it is always better to not start those things anyway.
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