Friday, December 21, 2007

aches and pains---[Fiction] Friday/Friday 5

pardon my disinterest

to converse. toothache

is no joke. sanitary ware

was a bloody mess after I

brushed with medicated

paste. in my mouth

rolled tongue feels akin to

fuselage of an aircraft.


this year, winter solstice

is overshadowed by pain.



15 comments:

Marcia (MeeAugraphie said...

Oh, that is so easy to relate to! Love your use of fuselage.

Brian said...

Ouch! That sounds bad. Hope the aches ease soon.

Michele sent me. :)

Square1 said...

This is a good take on the Fiction Friday Prompt. Nicely done as usual, Gautami.

gautami tripathy said...

Hey Brian, I don't have a toothache now but I did have one last week!

lissa said...

Not sure it's an image I wanted to see on a Friday but very well described.

lissa said...

Hooray for Blogger for bringing back the URL option!

pjd said...

I haven't visited everyone's yet, but I bet most focus on the reluctance of the character to attend the celebration at all. I like your approach, that the character wants to be there but external circumstances make it an unhappy experience.

I'm trying to figure out how a rolled tongue feels like an airplane fuselage. :-)

Michelle Johnson said...

Love the way you fused the Solstice with Friday 5. Hope your aches are soothed soon. Thanks for sharing. Keep up the good work. Have a nice day.

rashbre said...

Nice one. The fuselage of an aircraft is an interesting metaphor!

Borut said...

I agree, no joking with tootache...

No winter solstice -
thinking about a bad tooth
made me forget all

polona said...

ouch... i can almost feel the pain :(
but this was an enjoyable read nonetheless

LittleWing said...

ohhh, i cringe with pain...

mariacristina said...

i hope this poem is fiction, gautami. Great use of the words.

paisley said...

and wouldn't you know i woke up with one this very morning!!!!!!

tumblewords said...

Gadzooks! I feel the pain. Neat use of words - I couldn't do it this week..