Monday, October 03, 2011

wings of fire

I am thankful for the wings
as I circle over the church
don't you remember how I was lost
looking for signs in the concrete jungle
as I trudged alone in the cobbled path
flying is an adventure
the fearful birds give me a wide berth

in my present state I look down,
see myriads of beings fighting for space.
And I fly far away

39 comments:

barbara said...

I like.
The short lines "flying is an adventure"/ "And I fly far away"--really nice.

Christine said...

fighting for space, that is the feeling in the concrete jungle

flaubert said...

Nice, Gautami. To be able to fly...

Pamela

Sherry Blue Sky said...

I love this one....well done.

turtlememoir said...

A flying elephant - yes, I imagine the birds would give her a wide berth. :) I like too the part about being lost and looking for signs... In fact, you have humanized the elephant very successfully - except that we (or most of us), unlike her, have not yet discovered the wings on our backs. An exceptional poem, really. Thank you.

morning said...

wow, wings of fire,
love the idea.

Brian Miller said...

i think i would fly far...

izzy said...

Yup I would give them all a wide berth! thanks-

nan said...

fantastic.

Helen said...

I really like this ..........

Tumblewords: said...

I, too, yearn to fly far away!

Carrie Burtt said...

Beautiful Gautami....:-)

Kay L. Davies said...

I can feel these lines:
"looking for signs in the concrete jungle
"as I trudged alone in the cobbled path"

Kay, Alberta, Canada
An Unfittie’s Guide to Adventurous Travel

Anonymous said...

Ah! To be able to fly...what a wonderful dream! Well done!

ShonEjai said...

Very well written. The thought of flying is magnificent indeed

oldegg said...

If that elephant asks, I'm with him.

Kerry O'Connor said...

This is a wonderfully imaginative piece.

Thank you for sharing your work on Real Toads.

Jinksy said...

I bet there's many an elephant who would like to fly away...

Nanka said...

Great combination of three prompts in a short verse. You have said a lot in just a few words!! The elephant saw it all and flew away!!

Mystic_Mom said...

Well done!

Mike Patrick said...

Many levels can be read into this poem, Gautami. There is the flying elephant metaphor of course, but it can stand for the many people lost in the concrete jungle. There are those who escape by flying to another part of the world, and there are those who die. As angels, they would circle the church before flying to the eternal home. Truly a lovely poem.

Ann LeFlore said...

Wow great elephants to have wings this is the second poem I read about flying elephants excellent
http://gatelesspassage.com/2011/10/03/memories-and-photographs-of-you/#comment-1370

Janet said...

Fantastic!

keiths ramblings said...

You never cease to surprise me!

Deborah said...

Oooh ... wonderful!

Caty said...

i would love to have wings to fly from the crowded chaos as well! this poem was an adventure :)

Kristen Haskell said...

I would love to experience flight. What a lovely thought.

brenda w said...

leaving the heaviness of gravity behind....

Jo Bryant said...

great writing

Ann Grenier said...

Ah, to fly far away... Love your poem.

Magical Mystical Teacher said...

A whole story in just a few words! I wish I had the grace of this flying one. Alas, I don't!


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Morning said...

it is cool to fly,
keep flying high.

you rock.

sayan said...

that's what all of us dream of...to fly away....

Joanne Elliott said...

It is amazing when we can gain perspective. Lovely poem.

Trellissimo said...

Up, up and away! :)

Isabel Doyle said...

your lines match the prompt effortlessly

mjshorts said...

A great poem to match these wordle words.
I can understand why the birds kept out of his way.
I wish I could sprout wings and fly every time I was lost.

S. Sharp said...

I want to fly too. Beautiful ;)

Nicholas V. said...

Our words have wings and our imagination can make even elephants fly.
Lovely poem!